A Time To Improve

Hey guys! I'd like to review and help improve some characters! Just put a link here and I will reply as soon as possible!

_{yells gently!! i just fixed this one up a bit but a bit of help is always nice !!}

Alice

_{yells gently!! i just fixed this one up a bit but a bit of help is always nice !!}

Okay so I like her. But give her some fight, give her some weaknesses, make her real. Like, ya know more than just tired and all in all is perfect. Because even the gods mess up, and do things wrong. Have faults, have depression. So maybe make it instead of PTSD an insomniac. Besides. The best characters are the hurt ones, that arise in pain. Maybe have her see her kids die, break free, and fight through the pain in a gorgeous battle. Oh and powers! She is a Goddess. Maybe she's always had powers or something and so she thinks that she was born a witch or something. Again. Just play around with it. She sort of reminds me of my character, Crystal. Who is also super hella motherly and ends up becoming the Goddess Of Life…but she has a tragic back story, and it forms her and changes her ya know? Basically. Do a reality check.