Constant noise. I'm not really "scared" of it but when there is a constant repeating noise like clicking or tapping in makes me want to curl into a ball and scream.
To add to this, a constant high pitched sound played in an instrument like a violin can really send shivers down my spine. Also what scares my is really weird but being pregnant with something supernatural and having it claw itself out of my stomach. Weird I know and I don't know why it springs to mind.
Constant noise. I'm not really "scared" of it but when there is a constant repeating noise like clicking or tapping in makes me want to curl into a ball and scream.
To add to this, a constant high pitched sound played in an instrument like a violin can really send shivers down my spine. Also what scares my is really weird but being pregnant with something supernatural and having it claw itself out of my stomach. Weird I know and I don't know why it springs to mind.
Also someone having freckles then whatever your creature is playing dot to dot with their freckles. Painful and scary
what the… some of these things are oddly specific
Can you critique this character? Thanks!
what the… some of these things are oddly specific
i know, i have a very vivid imagination which when writing horror can be very useful sometimes and terrifying when i have to go to sleep
Can you look over mine please! :) not complete but what are your thoughts?
A strong character, well defined and the personality is well thought out and makes contextual sense. There's lots you can do with this, the only thing i would say would be to elaborate on the backstory and her relationship with her husband.
Can you critique this character? Thanks!
i like the character and the extra note at the end lol. just make sure you don't fall into the trap of having a gay character just be gay, make sure there is some depth there. I'm not saying there isn't any there because there is, just make sure that shines through in whatever you write. Other than that, well done!
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Can you critique these characters please? Also, if you know please inform me what weight they would all be, as so far I’ve just been ignoring that.
Hi, it's me again! :) Could you take a look at another character for me please? Noah Araullo This guy's been through a lot of critique haha, I just want to know if there's any details left hanging that need tying, I'm hoping that he's enough of a cohesive whole at this point. Thanks again!
Hi, it's me again! :) Could you take a look at another character for me please? Noah Araullo This guy's been through a lot of critique haha, I just want to know if there's any details left hanging that need tying, I'm hoping that he's enough of a cohesive whole at this point. Thanks again!
I really like this charecter, it's original and from what I've seen doesn't really conform to any stereotypes, which I really love and apreciate. As someone who dabbles in songwriting I'd love to learn more about that aspect of thingsand also his relationship with his parents as it seemed kinda brief but other than that its a versatile character that I think will perform well in a story. Well done! xx
(i think u skipped mine ;-; )
Rohl - I like the idea of a charismatic conman being the villain as it can make for an interesting story however, the one thing that is missing from him is an in depth backstory, (what was his childhood like?, why did he become a conman?). Other than that I like the originality of the charecter.
Sashay - weight ideas: 123 to 136 pounds if she has a small frame; 133 to 147 pounds if she has a medium frame. Again the only thing missing is mobackstory but other than that it's great
I'll have to critiqye the third character later, sorry xx
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Thanks for the help! The main reason Rohl doesn’t have more backstory is that Sashay is the protagonist, and she herself never learns much about him.
It would help if you looked at the "Looks" and "Nature" sections
the background is kind of a mess right now
Hi, it's me again! :) Could you take a look at another character for me please? Noah Araullo This guy's been through a lot of critique haha, I just want to know if there's any details left hanging that need tying, I'm hoping that he's enough of a cohesive whole at this point. Thanks again!
I really like this charecter, it's original and from what I've seen doesn't really conform to any stereotypes, which I really love and apreciate. As someone who dabbles in songwriting I'd love to learn more about that aspect of thingsand also his relationship with his parents as it seemed kinda brief but other than that its a versatile character that I think will perform well in a story. Well done! xx
Aah I'm glad about the "not stereotypical" part! I can definitely detail the history with his parents a little more, you're right. Thanks again, and I really appreciate your kind words :)
Hi, it's me again! :) Could you take a look at another character for me please? Noah Araullo This guy's been through a lot of critique haha, I just want to know if there's any details left hanging that need tying, I'm hoping that he's enough of a cohesive whole at this point. Thanks again!
I really like this charecter, it's original and from what I've seen doesn't really conform to any stereotypes, which I really love and apreciate. As someone who dabbles in songwriting I'd love to learn more about that aspect of thingsand also his relationship with his parents as it seemed kinda brief but other than that its a versatile character that I think will perform well in a story. Well done! xxAah I'm glad about the "not stereotypical" part! I can definitely detail the history with his parents a little more, you're right. Thanks again, and I really appreciate your kind words :)
Anytime!
Hey, its me again, mind looking at this character? :0
