~~Character Critique/Feedback~~

@Hac_KinG Sorry for such a late reply OTL
Ramule

• Favorite scars are always a fun thing to have, not gonna lie. Fleshes out the personality, too. Are there any other mannerisms you could give him, though? Talking with hands is good, but are there specific gestures you can put down? Ones for each emotion? Right now, it feels a little vacant.
• Motivation is good, but give him multiple! It is called motivations after all, not motivation, and multiple will really flesh him out, especially since he's so old. There must have been multiple things that got him out of bed in the morning, right?
• If he's so old, why does he still have the headstrong trait of running into fights? Has he not learned his lesson? Not that I expect him to be all wise or something, but has he not learned his lesson yet? Will he ever? In a way, ancient characters are some of the hardest to write, because you expect them to be wiser than humans, and yet because they are fictional characters they still need to grow somehow. And we are never truly done growing, but this trait feels a little… young?
• I like this grudge-holding and how it plays into his prejudice. Just uh… be careful I guess? With the hating the Japan Clan thing? If they have customs that are specific to Japan, try not to have him be a dick about it or something. Make it clear that his beef is with the people, but not the people's culture. I don't think he does, but just a fair warning.
• Talents and hobbies are good! Who does he open up to, by the way? Has he really just internalized these things for so many years? Or does someone understand him?
• Man, that's a big sword. Compensating for something, perhaps? jk jk I like him! He seems like a fun character with few critiques for me to give!

@Snowmirror
Thanks for the reply
• I’m glad i got the motivations right, i felt like it was a bit too plain. I fixed his Mannerisms as much as i could (i honestly wasn’t sure about the last two either, but i threw them in there anyway)
• I really wasn’t sure what to write about his nature, it just didn’t know what to add. Until recently he’s been a side character so i just did not know how to change him for the better. Thanks for pointing that out, it’s really helpfull!! I did make some changes here and there to try and make it better, but that’s debatable. I wanted him to be that kind of character that’s really nice to people and tries to help no matter what. As for protecting his sister, he has a very strong bond with her so he is ready to put himself in danger just to know her safe. And yes, out of all the characters, he probably has the highest level on the morality scale.
• He’s young because that’s when his parents were taken away . Of course, he could have waited until he was older to set out on this journey, but his sister’s health condition is worrying him a lot, since he heard it’s very possible that her illness is incurable, and being the kid that he is, he tries to help her his own way. If he were older, he would probably think things through a little bit more, but he would still be the same caring, responsible and ready-to-help boy. Also, if he would have waited, it’s possible that her sister’s condition could worsen in time (no one knows for sure if this will happen, but Tanis still thinks it’s best to act before it’s too late). Here's the updated version:

• I’m still working on certain things, but i hope this answers some of the questions. I made some modifications, i hope they’re good. Thank you for the notices, they help so much.
• I also have the link for his sister, if you can take a look at her:

@Kaloobia Life's been a bit hectic lately, but I am still here to critique, so let's jump in!
Kalena

• Staring off into the distance when pondering and being attentive when others talk feels a bit cliche, doesn't it? Generally, we all kind of do this. People dissociate a little bit when they're deep in thought, and we tend to listen to people we like when they speak. I think you can either get rid of these or put a twist on them that makes them uniquely Kalena!
• Her motivations are cute and wholesome, but she's only human. Is there any selfish desire that drives her? Anything a little less starry-eyed? Also, her being short-tempered only seems to be triggered by things that naturally make people snap. Stress, being busy, zero sleep, they make the most patient of people snap, so is that really a short temper or just a thing that people do? If she was short-tempered, I imagine much more minor things would set her off, like someone tapping their foot or asking too many questions - things that most of can ignore/deflect that she just can't.
• She doesn't tolerate being taken advantage of, which is great, but where does she draw the line with 'forgive and forget' and being petty? What makes her become petty? Small things? Typically, being petty means you're holding onto some pretty little things, so wouldn't her pettiness override her forgive and forget diplomacy?
• Even though she has stated flaws, they feel weak compared to the more positive parts of her personality. None of these flaws feel like they hold consequence or weight against the rest of her, so I would say develop them more. At some point, readers should be afraid of what her flaws are going to do to her, or at least be a little stressed about it.
• I'd say fill out the entire social page, but I barely check social pages to begin with so…
• Her history is really good, but make sure that if you post snippets of her poems/lyrics, that they live up to the hype! Hyping up a character's ability is great in telling, but even more amazing in showing. I wouldn't say she's all over the place, but she does feel a little underdeveloped. Nothing that you can't fix though, so good luck!

(please don't worry, real life takes priority, take all the time you need <3) Thank you so much!! Everything you noticed makes sense, and I'll be sure to work on them!

aaa, sorry for bothering, but are these still open for new characters?