Critique My Ladies?
ayana- very well written character, may be a little young for a strong fighting character, but that will only add to the story
fjola- nice character, feels like an aunt type of
jasmine- she is a very relatable character
karla- well rounded, full of detailes
lily- honorable character, readers will be excited to see this character grow
talia- tough, intimating character
overall well rounded characters, and story line. height and weight relating to age is extremely accurate.
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@"Suga Lover"
Thank you so much!
One thing though, Ayana only really fought once. Even then, she just distracted while her mother did the real work. Oh and I'm kinda surprised you thought Talia was intimidating.
Again, thank you!
The only reason Talia seemed intimidating is of her appearance, (which can make a bigger impression then personality sometimes) her scars, burns and muscles and how she always has at least on hand on her hip.
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Oh, I kinda see it now.
Again, thanks for the critique!