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Halp (please critique my boy)

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@Hac_KinG

So, i would really appreciate a critique (or 20 lol) for my boy Kaleb. BUT! I would love someone a WHOLE LOT MORE if they'd be willing to draw him!!!! I do have some of my own drawings (and a color chart) loaded onto his profile, but i suck at drawing guys (well, i suck at drawing in general…but i try).
Here he is!: https://www.notebook.ai/plan/characters/500319#overview_panel

also, because im curious af, do you think one of your characters would have a thing for him? Would one hate him like crazy? if so, why? (optional, you dont have to answer me lololol, this is just for shits and giggles)

I'll be glad to look him over. (I'd offer to draw, but I too suck at drawing guys)

He's interesting!
I think he's a pretty well developed character, but his flaws aren't really flaws. Usually, in writing, flaws are aspects of a character's personality that are almost downright unlikable. Also, everyone has prejudices. Be it against a particular person or race.
As for what one of my characters would think, I'll go with Ellen (Her bio is public if you want to take a look at her). She'd find him fairly interesting, but be wary of him. I think they'd eventually bond over space and cats though.

@Hac_KinG

Yeah. I noticed the flaws thing too. For some odd reason im having a difficult time thinking of some. And as for prejudices, he believes everyone has an opportunity to be good. But he canr shake the feeling that churches (no the goers, the buildings and most priests) are shady.

But yes i totally agree with your character! I think Kaleb would admire her tough attitude, but think her soft side is even more endearing. I think they might be friends!
But omg thank you so much for your insight! It really helps!!!!!

:D
Maybe find out his Myers Briggs type. If you can pin down his type, you should be able to find multiple things that could apply to him.

barabara

Where do you want me to send my Drawing of your character?

@Hac_KinG

HOLY SMOKES YOU REALLY DREW HIM?!?!?! OOOHHHHMYGODILOVEYOU

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@Hac_KinG

@barabara
OMG I LOVE IT! IM GONNA ADD IT TO HIS PROFILE ONCE I GET THE CHANCE

barabara

Thanks! Also your drawings are really great!

I love how instead of "unknown" for his age, you actually gave a legitamate REASON for it. You have such a developed character. Also, the scars that you described in "Flaws" should go in "Identifying Marks".