I will critique your charachter! [CLOSED]

Hewwo again o3o
Here's another oc o3o

I don't even know what to say about her, she's a mess :0

Elliott (Macnon) can you do this one?

Rate mine,please! Mortus,Demi-Goddess of Earth

Elizabeth Amber Darnell would love to hear your opinions! :)

@Kaloobia

1. How does a human have a cat-like body? I don't really understand.
2. There's really little on how he became popular enough to live on his music, there should be more about that.
3. Is the person in the moodboard his face reference?
4. So his audience is largely LGBTQA?
5. What does he do when he collaborated with female artists? Or does he just not do that?
6. Who gets him all the friendship bracelets? Are all his friends into that kind of stuff?
7. Just how popular is he, it's not really specified.

1.Same way a person has a pear-shaped body, or an hourgalss form I don't know haha. It's more about the way he moves, I guess.
3.Yes, I like to have faceclaims for characters.
4.It can be assumed, yeah! I actually haven't thought much about audiences, that's a good thing to work on and figure out!
5.It was just a tiny detail, a fun fact, when he DOES collab with male artists, nothing to do with how much he collabs/who he collabs with regularly. Interesting inquiry tho, I should take a look at long-term partnerships and stuff
6.His siblings and baby cousins! I'll add that :)

These are all good questions, and I'll def address the popularity factor. Thanks for you time! :-)

@distinctlyunfunny, your character is private

@distinctlyunfunny, your character is private

Whoops I thought I fixed that, thank you!

@Seth

1. "Slang derogatory" may be better worded as "slur"
2. Is it not considered weird for them to wear plants if they are plants? I mean, humans use animal skin but not human skin, but they seem closer to plants than humans are.
3. "All the skin colours plants have" The petals or the stem?
4. The half plant part will propably take st least 5 kg off their weight, propably more but it depends on how much of them are plants.
5. "Skin colour can be used to determine health" Maybe specify a bit more? Does it rot/go dark like a plant?
6. The birth ritual is really thought out, god job!
7. "Good instincts" All of them? Just all of them? Maybe that would cause problems because itwon't allow them to have largly different instincts at times.
8. Is there any reason for the violent traditin of having kids eat other aliens? There must be some kid f evolutionary need/conflict to have a species do this
9. Government is tribals or clans, but who leads those?
10. Since you refer to some of the occupatiions with gendered terms, is it just a custom to divide themselvesor is it just language?
11. What kind of games do they love?

@Lottie M

1. Does 14/immortal mean they are 14, have been immortal for 14 years, or looks/gained immortality at 14?
2. "pologizes lots and lots" may be shortened to "Apolegetic"
3. Seems very outgoing and heerful for an introvert
4. Does she have a romatic orientation oris she unsure? (Ps. If she has none, it's called aromantic)
5. How come her favorite colours are her hair colours? Is it dyed?
6. Why was she taken to a magical lab if she hadn't revealed her shapeshifting?
7. What were her motvations to do the cat transformation?

@SupernaturalSyGuy

1. Why does his powers darken his assets (Give him more melanin)?
2. Being shy byt liking people fearing you and having anger issues don't go so well together usually.
3. His personality type really doesn't seem like the person who would lash out at things.
4. Part of the backround is formatted so it sticks out the screen
5. Telling his entire life story in a story like format instead of summing it up might be a bad idea, I suggest shortening it.

@SupernaturalSyGuy

1. Why does his powers darken his assets (Give him more melanin)?
2. Being shy byt liking people fearing you and having anger issues don't go so well together usually.
3. His personality type really doesn't seem like the person who would lash out at things.
4. Part of the backround is formatted so it sticks out the screen
5. Telling his entire life story in a story like format instead of summing it up might be a bad idea, I suggest shortening it.

1. His powers darken his eyes and hair as reflection to his pyrokinetic abilities.
2. That really just depends on how I write him though, so it can be done.
3. It is possible though!
4. Sighs. Notebook.ai's formating…. I'll see if I can't fix it.
5. That is also intended to be the prologue of my story, which is why it is in a story-like format. I do, however, kinda plan on shortening it at some point.

Alright, that's good! Sorry I couldn't be to more help! (You should propably write him feeling guilty about his anger issues if you're going to keep him very shy and nice, just a tip)

@Lottie M

1. Does 14/immortal mean they are 14, have been immortal for 14 years, or looks/gained immortality at 14?
2. "pologizes lots and lots" may be shortened to "Apolegetic"
3. Seems very outgoing and heerful for an introvert
4. Does she have a romatic orientation or is she unsure? (Ps. If she has none, it's called aromantic)
5. How come her favorite colours are her hair colours? Is it dyed?
6. Why was she taken to a magical lab if she hadn't revealed her shapeshifting?
7. What were her motvations to do the cat transformation?

Thank you! I'll reply to these and add the info to her page.

1. She was 14 when she was made immortal
2. Good idea
3. She's only in human form around her close friends, so she seems fairly extroverted. If she was to be human around people she didn't know she'd be awkward and uncomfortable.
4. Oh yes, she's aromantic as well.
5. Her hair is naturally (magically) her favourite colours because her human form was created based on her soul
6. Because they were looking for magical creatures, not necessarily ones that do anything. She was in griffin form, a magical creature from another world. They didn't realise that she was a shapeshifting magical creature pretending to be a different magical creature..
7. She was in our world and had found humans that she eventually loved and adopted as her family. They were all killed when the romans invaded and she decided she'd had enough of everyone she loved dying.

@distinctlyunfunny

1. Thick legs as in muscular or just a kind of bodytype?
2. Black eyes as when it's so dark brown it looks black or actually black?
3. How does she make jobs meet without taking any jobs?
4. YOU LOVE YOUR CHARACTERS VERY MUCH IT'S ADORABLE
5. The politics section is for her political stance, like if she's right wing or left wing, or if she supports/ is gainst any policies/politicians
6. The backstory and school section is really relatable xD
7. You SHOULD pick a birthday, or at least say something like "She hs forgotten" or "She doesn't celebrate birthdays"
8. Does she keep the animals she picks up?
9. The notes part should be on backround
10. Doesn't her dress get chunky if she has a scarf around her leg under it?
11. Where did she wear her scarf on the head-to-toe armour?

Hello! Id love if you could critique my character Wren. Just a little background: He's part of a race called Animan, who change into one predestined animal. Theres a caste system, where Anisal is the lower status and essentially do the dirty work of the town.

@distinctlyunfunny

1. Thick legs as in muscular or just a kind of bodytype?
2. Black eyes as when it's so dark brown it looks black or actually black?
3. How does she make jobs meet without taking any jobs?
4. YOU LOVE YOUR CHARACTERS VERY MUCH IT'S ADORABLE
5. The politics section is for her political stance, like if she's right wing or left wing, or if she supports/ is gainst any policies/politicians
6. The backstory and school section is really relatable xD
7. You SHOULD pick a birthday, or at least say something like "She hs forgotten" or "She doesn't celebrate birthdays"
8. Does she keep the animals she picks up?
9. The notes part should be on backround
10. Doesn't her dress get chunky if she has a scarf around her leg under it?
11. Where did she wear her scarf on the head-to-toe armour?

1. pretty muscular, but she was kind of lanky when she was younger
2. if the sun is in her eyes they look a little brown, but it usually never happens so they look black all the time
3. she hasn't taken many jobs in a while because she's been busy with her sister, and she's running out money (her jobs aren't meeting, she's almost dead broke)
4. YES I DO SHES PRICKLY BUT I LOVE HER AND EVERYBODY ELSE ♥︎
5. thankk you!!
6. eeeeeeeee
7. ok I shall
8. no, not usually, they're usually injured and she'll let them go after a while. If her sister can convince her she'll hang onto them for a little bit longer.
9. thank you I'll change that.
10. it's not like a thick winter scarf, it's more like one of those thin woolen ones people wear over their faces in the desert (ill make sure to clarify that somewhere)
11. it's usually tied around her waist which is fine because it's not in the way of anything.

and thank you so so so much for helping me with this little bean

Tobias Ash Here is Tobias Ash the Uncle of Jacqueline Ash, The Master Blaster, The Slayer of the Unholy, the only guy who will knit you a sweater just to choke you with it.

Hello again qwq
I have this villain boi i just made, i am absolutely not sure what to think about him, he's my first ever villain - be brutally honest if you have to TwT

(Also, his name needs to be changed ASAP :0 )

Hello again qwq
I have this villain boi i just made, i am absolutely not sure what to think about him, he's my first ever villain - be brutally honest if you have to TwT

(Also, his name needs to be changed ASAP :0 )

I know I'm not the critiquer but I thought I could take a crack if that's all g. NGL I don't really care if it's all g cause Ima do it anyways. This is fun already.
1: You weren't kidding about the name.
All in all I like what your going with although what is a Bambi Lesbian?
I like to think of him as the step mum evil queen like controlling shit from the background while everyone freaks out about all the chaos this person is just giggling their ass off in a corner with a bowl of cereal.
1 more thing, do they have legs or a snake tail I must've missed that somewhere.

Hello again qwq
I have this villain boi i just made, i am absolutely not sure what to think about him, he's my first ever villain - be brutally honest if you have to TwT

(Also, his name needs to be changed ASAP :0 )

I know I'm not the critiquer but I thought I could take a crack if that's all g. NGL I don't really care if it's all g cause Ima do it anyways. This is fun already.
1: You weren't kidding about the name.
All in all I like what your going with although what is a Bambi Lesbian?
I like to think of him as the step mum evil queen like controlling shit from the background while everyone freaks out about all the chaos this person is just giggling their ass off in a corner with a bowl of cereal.
1 more thing, do they have legs or a snake tail I must've missed that somewhere.

Thank you for joining in and helping, there are so many people I need to do already so you helping them with some things is good to start with

Hello again qwq
I have this villain boi i just made, i am absolutely not sure what to think about him, he's my first ever villain - be brutally honest if you have to TwT

(Also, his name needs to be changed ASAP :0 )

I know I'm not the critiquer but I thought I could take a crack if that's all g. NGL I don't really care if it's all g cause Ima do it anyways. This is fun already.
1: You weren't kidding about the name.
All in all I like what your going with although what is a Bambi Lesbian?
I like to think of him as the step mum evil queen like controlling shit from the background while everyone freaks out about all the chaos this person is just giggling their ass off in a corner with a bowl of cereal.
1 more thing, do they have legs or a snake tail I must've missed that somewhere.

oh damn ty so much qwq
And yeah, his name is a huge mess qwq
Bambi lesbians is the 80's term for lesbians that would rather kiss and cuddle rather than sleep together.
Oh damn, that idea is genius i love it :0
He now has legs, he hated his tail so he got rid of it
(Btw i am updating this boy as i go, he is still missing some info :0 )

@Herter

1. Specify the hairstyle more. Is it worn in a ponytail or up at all? Down? In front of or behind shoulders?
2. Natural or neon red hair?
3. Any kind of light or sunlight specifically?
4. HOLY that quote is intense
5. How does her job "Taking care of the ground" work and why is she doing it?
   Really cool charachter! good job