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Could you do my child, Kenna? Azia Eden Amaris Don't feel any rush, thank you!

@TheDoggoMaster You are very welcome!!

Could you do my child, Kenna? Azia Eden Amaris Don't feel any rush, thank you!

(A side note, Kenna is very relatable in the way that I too am 16 and like 5'5 XD Nice to see a fellow "shortie")

You have slightly contradictory words in your description of her body type. You say she is delicate and thin but then says she is muscled around the shoulders and caves/thighs. This would be better described as perhaps a "Slim but Athletic Build"?? The sharp angles work with this too if that helps <3 I like her wide-ranged of flaws, it is often hard to think of good flaws and numerous flaws but these are tip-top! (Her sword is awesome too, dang!) Her backstory is killer! Great job on that, one thing though is you mention Ares as being an evil person and her greatest enemy but never really explain why? Or did I miss that part??

@Scout Thank you! And no you're right. It goes more into depth as to why Ares is evil in his own background, but his dark traits aren't revealed to Kenna until later in the book because she never really knew him when she was a child I should probably explain more about Ares in her background though ahaha

@kiley_arrants Oooohhhh! I gotcha, always hard to sneak in details in the right place, I am always forgetting to do it too!

Hey!! If you’re not too overwhelmed, I’d love it if you could take a look at my girl!! No pressure if you’re super busy though. Thanks!
<3

(trigger warning for brief, non-detailed mention of sexual abuse)

Darling, I sadly a no stranger to that trigger (and I don't mean that as in I've been through it, my sympathy to anyone who has, I mean it is a popular trope and just.. hurts for villains)

You are too sweet and thanks for having an open mind for if I am busy, many thanks.
I think your description of Dahlia is AMAZING, the way you describe traits like an upturned nose and inverted pear body type is detailed in a way most aren't, even I don't describe like that as much as id like to
Based on your terms given under slang I am guessing you are not American OR these are just your universes terms used.
Idk why but vodka and Slurpees made me laugh XD Also I think I have a 6th sense for sensing fellow Bisexuals
I really can't give much criticism, she is such an awesome girl and GOOD FOR HER FOR STANDING UP AND GETTING JUSTICE (kinda reminds me of Frankenstein, the grave robbery part only)

Idk if i sent u this one before _{(I hav goldfish memory)}