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Show no mercy. (Criticism is needed!)

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I’ve created a new character and I’ve just layed out a general idea for what I want her to be, but I am having a hard time getting hard details hammered out and I feel like I’ve gone in a loop with some information.

Show no mercy in your criticism.

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@PurplePartyTiger language

NO MERCY!!! (goes to the link)
JUST GIVE ME A MINUTE, AND MERCY WILL NOT BE SERVED!

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@PurplePartyTiger language

Oh cool, it's Axion! :D

First thing I'm seeing is in the personality type. She is an ISTJ, but she's also very extroverted?
People can have hobbies they're not good at. ;)

Other than these, she's great so far. :D

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@EmptyNebula group

It says elf but she is 6'0

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@PurplePartyTiger language

How tall are elves? :I

person_off
Deleted user

Oof I clicked I instead of E ._.
My bad.

definitely not a bad start. Background info is a must, but i assume you're workin' on it. I think the ISTJ and the "very extroverted" personalities clash pretty hard causing some confusion. I'd guess you mean something along the lines of, "wants to be a leader and tries to be one every now and then, but she cracks really easily under the pressure/responsibility. It's draining to her, yet she tries anyways."
I kind of with that there was a bit more information overall though. The identifying marks tab is pretty great for deeper physical details, but i understand that not all characters have these wicked scars or any other flashy features (thankfully lol.)

Otherwise, it seems to mesh together pretty well as far as i can see. Keep it up! :)

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(Umm I corrected the ISTJ it’s supposed to be ESTJ, I just derped momentarily.)
But thanks for the criticism, I never know what to fix on a character when I just start out on one.

oops sorry. That makes it a lot clearer then lol. Good luck man :)

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Deleted user

Thanks!

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@EmptyNebula group

sorry about the elves, i was thinking about christmas and then dwarves, elves can be 6'0.