Will critique all characters and draw one (1) of each username - DISCONTINUED

I would absolutely love it if you could you draw my character, Celeste: Celeste Dewar

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@Celestial-B Sorry for the delay, but here are you characters. Please send us an email address so we can send you the artwork!

Peyton Stewart:
Brooklyn: First off, I want to say thank you for two things:
I often find it difficult to relate to characters on a physical level. My hair is not quite the commonly used “jet black”, but its darker than “chestnut brown”. The way you described Pace’s hair was so relatable, and in my opinion, more realistic. Not many people have pure black hair, so your description was rather accurate.
The fact that you made Pace love running even though he’s bad at it was amazing. A lot of the time, people only like things that they are good at. A cool character that is willing to do something he likes even if he’s not good at it is so unique.
Anyways, I think Peyton is an incredibly well rounded and developed character. He seems so realistic. I found myself laughing at the favorite colour, not because I was making fun of him, but because it was so adorable. If you were to change something, I think it would be to expand on your backstory. You could maybe talk about if he struggled with opening up to his new friends because of the bullying he experienced. You could describe his feelings when he saw people wanting to hang out with him. I think that would add a ton of depth.
Delta: I love this character so much. On every single page I caught myself smiling to myself because we need more guys like him in the world. I especially love that he’s not perfect appearance wise, often times we find characters that are not physically or emotionally flawed, and the stretch marks on his legs were a very nice little touch. Something to add would be how his past and his family shaped who he is today. That backstory would add some depth to the character and make Pace more relatable. I love this character though and relate to him on so many levels.
Tallinn: There isn’t many problems with Pace, due to the fact that he’s a well fleshed out character, which allowed me to get a clear image of him in my mind. The only problems that can come to mind at this moment, is to maybe add more Prejudices, seeing as people in the real world always have many prejudices. Other than that, you included many mannerisms that he does and when/why he does them. One more thing, I would recommend giving him more positive characteristics. You seem to be giving him many negative ones that may cause the reader to have troubles connecting with the character on an emotional level.

Darya:
Brooklyn: I love how her hair is naturally wavy like a surfer, or someone who spends a ton of time in the ocean. Also a huge fan of the body description, I thought it was super clever. Do Gods/Godesses get to choose their markings? If so, you might want to add some sort of emotional connection Dara has with them, and maybe talk about whether or not is was her choice to turn them dark, or if it was a sign of disrespect from the others. I also really enjoyed that her backstory is more than the typical “we were friends, but you did something, and I hate you for it” villain backstory. She has many reasons to hold a grudge. No pets? I kinda pictured her with an evil crab thing or something, but I understand if you wanted to keep her alone. To be completely honest, I would love to see a story where the villain is the main character because I love Dara so much. With such a well rounded character, your story will be AMAZING!!!
Delta: I like that she isn’t your typical antagonist while you still stuck with the trademark antagonistic nature. You were able to show us where she got her looks in a way? By telling us that she has the wavy hair (which I always imagine beach hair to be) and that immediately allowed me to see the connection between her being a sea deity. I’m sorry that I don’t have much to say as you have really developed her character well.
Tallinn: I personally find Darya to be a wonderful antagonist due to the fact that she truly has a reason to be angry. It is obvious you have given her a lot of thought. However, I do believe that a majority of her nature is surrounding her emotions towards the new caretaker, and that it not necessarily a good thing. While this new caretaker may be part of her motive, I do recommend distancing certain aspects of her character from him in order to make her her own person. I would also recommend adding a few more mannerisms such as what she does when nervous, angry, etc

Happy writing!
-The Blue Duck Team

@blue Duck

Wow, thank you guys so much! I wasn't expecting so much positive feedback hah, it really made me quite happy you all liked the two so much. And your delay was no problem, I'm glad I got any feedback at all to be honest!

Again, thanks! I'll certainly fix the few things you all suggested.

Can you do my trio please?

SO sorry about that. Celeste's profile is public now. Celeste Dewar

@cerebrxlthundxr No problem!
-The Blue Duck Team

@Finn Sorry about the delay, but here you go!
Megumi:
Brooklynn: First of all, I am a fan of characters with jet black hair. I really like the idea of light blue eyes. I’m picturing more of an icy look, and (in my opinion) it goes really well with her character traits. It’s a nice break from the typical black hair and ocean blue eyes look. Not gonna lie, but a lot of your points contradict each other. I would highly recommend going back in, and revising some of our character traits. Not trying to sound like every single english teacher out there, but you need to expand. Right now, Meg is one of those background characters. Give her life and make her the star!
Delta: Something that I noticed is that you put her as being 5’7” however you said that she’s “very short”, and let me tell you I am very short and I am 5 feet tall. That just didn’t match. Brooklynn agrees, as she is only 4’11” ¾ (tbh we’re all really short). Another thing is that her weight drastically doesn’t match her height. Though you said she was skinny, this is too skinny to function. There’s a lot of contradictions in your character. I’m sorry about my harshness, however these are things that will make your character more realistic. I do like your story and that she is surviving the apocalypse with her brother, however I think you definitely should expand more on your history. How did her parents die? How did this affect her and her experience in the apocalypse? I’d love to see character background and how it affects how she behaves now.
Tallinn: I’m going to start by stating the fact that you need more in the backstory than what you have. At the moment you have the basics, but what happened in the past few months? Has she lost any friends or loved ones besides her parents? As well as I’m wondering what type of apocalypse this is and what started it? Is it a zombie apocalypse? If so has she had to ‘save’ anyone by killing them? Is the cause of the apocalypse climate change? Nuclear warfare? Is the apocalypse affecting only her part of the world or is it everything? What has she contributed to the civilization during/after the apocalypse? Also, what is her relationship with her brother? Do they fight? Are her and her brother a part of a group of people for survival? If so, what’s the dynamic in that group? How are they getting their food/supplies? How did she get that scar on her back? Was it a childhood accident? If so, how did that affect her? Was the wound deep enough to affect her spinal cord? Are there any lingering effects from the wound? Apologies for all the questions, however, it is important to expand on all of these points
Have fun writting!
-The Blue Duck Team

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TBH, I don't need a drawing, I'd just like to hear your thoughts on one of my characters: Mr. Perelli's assistant

I forgot my email lol. [email protected]

Thanks!

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My email is currently not working.
Is there anyway you could put it here or somewhere else??
Thank you!

Could you critique my character? Her name's Virago. Here's the link, Rie Katayama

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@TheMusicalVampire

Here is your critique for Lucas. As for your drawing, when its finished, it will be uploaded to the Blue Duck Team Website. You can check it out here: https://sites.google.com/view/blueduckstudios/

Lucas Elise Rodger:
Brooklynn: First thing I would like to point out is that you created a male character that is not huge! I mean 5’5” isn’t super tall like all the other male book characters I’ve seen, so thank you. I also like the fact that he doesn’t have the perfect athletic body honed for battle. Its refreshing. I really like musical characters, but (being a musician myself), I would suggest not making him one of those characters that can just whip out a memorized seven page sonatina and play it perfectly. Add some scenes where he is practicing technique like scales or arpegios. Or maybe he’s struggling to perfect this one measure, but he keeps messing up. I would be careful when writing about someone with as many struggles that Lucas has. You don’t want him to become his illness. I liked how detailed the backstory is, and great job!
Delta: I do not know what this OC is for, however being completely honest, this made me kind of sad? This is nothing against your character, he just reminds me of one of the people I used to be friends with, a nostalgic feeling. Overall this character was very well developed. The fact that you gave him imperfections, while making him the main character is smart, though you may want to add a few positive things to the mix. Everybody has their problems, but everyone has good things too, which is important to remember. What about giving him just one person that he would protect over anyone? Like one of those characters that hates almost everybody but there’s that one person they would do anything to make smile? It may add some depth to him.
Tallinn: Okay, let’s start with the proportions on the body. If the character is slightly overweight, going off the 5’5 average weight for males of 122-150, being anywhere within that range would make them be of average weight, such as you put for him. If you would like him to be slightly overweight, I would go for 155-165. With that out of the way, lets get to what angers me about your backstory. No one can be ‘turned’ asexual, they can realize that they do not experience sexual attraction, therefore causing them to realize they are asexual, but,Luke obviously does experience sexual attraction,, seeing as you stated that in his backstory, so therefore he is not asexual. Same goes for being Aromantic. He may be repulsed by sexual acts at this moment, but he is not asexual, so thanks!!!!!! A question, what caused his depression? Because if it was his dog dying, let me say that this entire idea is mostly flawed and completely unrealistic. You may think I am being overly harsh towards your character, which is true, but the reason I am doing so is I really do not want mental illnesses being romanticized, which no offence, you are practically doing so. It is your choice whether you change it or not, but in my opinion, you should rework the most of the history and alter many of the mental illnesses since you are missing a myriad of factors when it comes to causation. If you would like to keep the illnesses, I recommend doing more research on them.

Happy Writing!!
-The Blue Duck Team

Would you mind critique and drawing my characters?

Here they are!

I know that y'all are busy with all of the requests, but I would really appreciate it if mine could be just critiqued? Lukas Jay Payge
I just can't figure this character out and some feedback would be great.

@Lokitty4236

Here is your review for Selene!
Selene:
Brooklynn: I think Selene is a good person. I really like how she is curvy. Like 99.9% of the time, our trained assassins are very strong and skinny, looking like supermodels. A curvy assassin can really change the game, because no one will suspect her. One thing I would add some mannerisms. If you need inspiration, I highly suggest you look at what things you or your family/friends do. An example of this would be chewing a fingernail, or snorting really loud when she fake laughs. You also might want to add another favorite weapon, because as awesome and as cool as magic is, a commander such as herself needs to be able to defend herself. I just really think you need to expand more on almost every subject. Expanding will give your character much more depth, and it will help create an emotional connection. Great work!
Delta: The first thing that I like about this character is that you put having no emotion as one of her flaws. While I’m sure with how she was trained this was a strength but now it will cause many challenges. I have said in a prior review, something that might be nice is that even though she’s cold to everyone who would be the one who cracks her shell, makes her smile. Even if she isn’t the type to smile, I had a friend who is kind of like your character personality wise, and I was one of the few people that could make her smile or laugh. I really hope something that you keep in mind for writing the story is if it’s set in modern time please include some time when she is struggling so hard to understand our current technology! This is in no way a critique but I think that it’d be really fun to read and just a nice little touch. Strangely this character reminds me quite a bit of said friend. Another thing I like about this character is that she has the powers of magic and she likes such a mundane thing as writing! This is just a nice little touch because it shows that she likes simple things. Maybe add a bit more to her backstory, like what happened in training, what her relationship with Argi is like. What caused her to become an advocate for lgbt rights? It’s these things that will give depth to your character.
Tallinn: As Delta said, I’d recommend adding more to your backstory, however, you should also expand on points such as her scars. Did she get them in a battle? Do the scars around her eyes affect her sight? If so, how does she deal with this? So forth. Yet, I have a huge problem with her only flaw. First off, the fact that here is only one flaw should be resolved. In order to give your character more depth, add a few more, varying between larger flaws like trust issues, and smaller ones like being picky about certain foods. This gives your character a more relatable factor, allowing your readers to like them more. Secondly, you contradict this a lot, saying she gets pissed off, or that she cares about her loved ones. Someone who simply has no emotion wouldn’t be bothered with things like that and would keep a level head in all scenarios. Maybe revise that to fit more to the job part of her life, or to strangers. Also, what happened before Agri took her in? What was her life like? What happened to her family? Did that affect her personality? Expand on points like that to give the character more life

Great work, and happy writing!

-The Blue Duck Team

@kat
Here are our opinions for Andrea. Sorry for the wait!

Andrea:

Brooklynn: The first thing I noticed is that for being “thin but fit”, she seems too skinny. Keep in mind that muscle is denser than fat, so fit people weigh more. I would recommend making her weigh more. I also like how you seem to understand the consequences of being impulsive. A lot of the time, we see impulsive characters that do whatever they want, and it’s funny, but they don’t face the rebound of their actions. One thing I would change is maybe giving her a less hectic schedule, or add some stress into the equation. Being a superhero and a college student is bound to be hectic, especially if your impulsive. Maybe make a note that her grades aren't perfect, or something like that. I also really like that Andrea had a really good relationship with her foster/adopted mother. Many stories portray them as villains, but it's nice to see her like her mom. Great job!

Delta: I really love the backstory of her character. I would like to know how her hair and basic appearance changes when she transforms into Halcyon. While this is a wonderful tactic for no one to recognize her, this seems impossible. Another thing you may want to think about is that you said she was fearless when really, no one is fearless. To me it would make sense if you made her secretly fear losing her loved ones after losing her mother, or being afraid of not conforming with societies ideals. This may not make sense I’m sorry. I love that you added that one of her motivations is to avenge her mother, this is a great reason to become a superhero! And another thing I love is her prejudice, because we as humans naturally believe the same thing, and that statement alone had me resonating with her so much.

Tallinn: I would start with adding a few more Mannerisms to her character, maybe stumbling over her words in certain scenarios, cracking her knuckles when she’s bored etc. Mannerisms help the character become fleshed out, giving them a more realistic take. With Genesis, what were their intentions? Did they want to make a team of humans to assist in justice? Did they want super powered bodyguards? What I’m trying to say is, were their intentions selfish? Positive or negative? Who was on the positive side and who was on the negative side of this plan? Also, are the supervillains of the nine children released(I assume yes)? Assuming they were treated the same in the lab, what do you think caused them to turn villainous? Back to Andrea, does the fact that a few of the other nine children are turning into villains make her want to hunt down the others? What about the fact that Muse was killed by a super villain? Does that make her more inclined to hunt them down? Was she ever informed of the tests? If so, how did she find out? Also, if Muse was older than her, how did Genesis choose subjects for the serum? We’re there other batches of participants that survived unknowingly? Last but not least, your comments about Hycon(?) seem to contradict each other, you change what shade of purple it is all of the time.

Great work and happy writing!
-The Blue Duck Team

@libralea
Sorry for the wait, but here is Herne. Great character!

Herne:

Brooklynn: I really like Herne as a person. To be honest, I had to write my review twice, because I was really tired, and didn’t give you much feedback. It was basically me asking you to write a book about Herne over and over and over again. I decided to go back in, and really pick apart you character, to help give Herne depth. The first thing I saw was he’s only 15. I wouldn’t normally critique a characters age, but because of his love life, and his emotional traits, I would highly recommend making him 16. That way, he can keep a bit of his youthfulness and innocence, while making it less strange for Asmodeus to call him “darling”. I would also like to note that knifes in the boots may look cool, but aren't very practical. It’s somewhere that is not easily accessible and, if he is captured at one point in time, somewhere the enemies will search first. I would love to see Herne sew his own pockets into his clothing, making adaptations to hide weapons. That would be really cool to read. I think you did a fabulous job, and good luck writing!

Delta: I laughed so much in his profile! It was really funny and I related to him a lot because he’s very short! Perhaps you could add in how the bullying affected his home life? Did his mother notice a change in him while she was sick? I have a question about the story, is being a VH or Vamp completely random? Are some people predisposed by their parents? Is it kind of like Harry Potter in that there are pure, half and human born? Also, if you need someone to proofread your story… hit the Blue Duck Team up. I am sorry that I don’t have much to critique but your characters are rather developed.

Tallinn: My main critique with Herne would be when it comes to the aspect of the unable to dye hair. Because of that factor, wouldn’t it make it much easier for VH’s to find Vampires and vice versa? Is this an aspect you really want in the story? It would make it much easier for Herne, but it’s not always the best thing to make the main characters job easy. Another thing, how did his family react to realizing he was a VH? Was anyone concerned for his safety? If so, did that affect how he has to hunt Vampires? I don’t have much to say besides that, he’s really well thought out

Happy writing!
-The Blue Duck Team

Thank you so much for the feedback! You've given me much to think about. :)

From the looks of it you're struggling with drawing, so as much as I would love it, if you can't I really don't mind, but could you critique two of my characters, please?

Hey guys! Due to the amount of characters that are being requested to be drawn, added with the stress of exam season we will only be drawing one of your characters each. You can specify which character you want drawn but seeing as how we are now down to only one artist, there's only so much we can do.
We hope you understand!
As for the characters already submitted that have not been drawn, we request that you chose a specific character, but if you'd rather we draw all of them, we will.
-The Blue Duck Team
(side note- you guys are all so nice! We love hearing from you an reading about your characters! Thank you so much for the support!)