camp for the gifted

(okay) she took perry to her room

(I missed a bunch…)

(my character Periwinkle (nickname is Perry) has just discovered the camp, also just met Kayla who turns invisible I guess and so it's her first night in the castle.)
the next morning
bounces on Kayla's bed
Kay-LA! Kay-LA! Kay-kay-kayyyyy-laaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!! Wake up!!!!!

(Hey a few tips for you since you're new here,
but then again, you probably won't need them since you rped for twenty years am I correct?

1) You have to use brackets for when you're speaking out of the rp.

2) Please work on your punuation and capitalization no offense, but its all over the place.

Also I won't be able to participate anymore due to the fact im all everywhere and in a lot of rps, Sorry.)

(I kinda needed those tips too, thanks and goodbye, your characters were great, can I actually adopt like one or two?)

(I only had one character and ehat do you mean by adopt?)

(I mean that Nienna Watson is my character and I can control what she does now without your permission since you've left)

(Also no offense, and nothing against you
but no thank you
I get picky about my characters alot and how they get portroyed, they have to be in a certain way.
Sorry, I hope you understand.)

Kay-LA! I'm realllly hungry and if you don't wake up I'm going to turn small so I can slip under the door and get some food from the great dining hall! Why'd you lock it, anyway?

kayla slowly opened her eyes

“KAY-LA!!!!”

kayla smiled at perry

she then got up and sat on her bed

"I need you to look for my favorite dried flower. It's a sunflower, I dried it and put it in my hair - like everything else in it, I never take it out. But tonight, it fell out of braid! HELP ME FIND IT! And then, breakfast."

its probally in the bed

"Well, help me look!"

kayla got up and started searching the bed

( So um
I'm like really sorry to pop on here again
and I really don't want to be mean and offensive,
but one of my friends is like a grammer nazi and stuff
and she was really bothered by how you are writing,
she didn't want to seem mean so she wanted me to tell you to
take the advice I had told you a page before.)

(Hey a few tips for you since you're new here,
but then again, you probably won't need them since you rped for twenty years am I >correct?

1) You have to use brackets for when you're speaking out of the rp.

2) Please work on your punuation and capitalization no offense, but its all over the place.

Also I won't be able to participate anymore due to the fact im all everywhere. Sorry.)

well is she on here

You could say she stalks this post.

(okie dokie… XD)

( No im sorry, I forgot to use the brackets, whoops.)

well tell her that if shes not rolrplaying on here to not correct us

( but i'll fix it)

(Hello. I am said friend. I was not attempting to correct you, merely to offer advice that would help you in the future. That is all, thank you.)

(oh im sorry )

(It's fine!)

(okay.)

"Well, help me look!"

alright alright she said and started looking