I think it looks okay. It urges you to read more to find out what the person is talking about.
Writing Is The Best! *screams and throws computer across room*
I like it. It's interesting, but not begging for attention. It would do well in the market, but it doesn't look like it was made for the market. Good job. I want more.
Awesome! Thanks for the feedback!
Once upon a time, there were two gods.
Hello!
They were opposite, one of death and darkness, and one of light and life.
(Hello!)
They were the original gods, the ones around at the start of the universe.
Over the first 100 years of the universe, they grew stronger. Humanity arose at the end of those 100 years, and the gods were worshiped as the creators.
Then, on the 100th year, two new gods rose. They also represented the light and the dark, but were more powerful than the original two gods.
The two new gods fought the old gods for their position. The old gods had more experience, but the new gods had more power.
The new gods won and pushed the old gods to the background. They were mostly forgotten and their temples were torn down.
For years, the new gods ruled. New gods came into being and joined them. The old god of life and light joined them as well, not wanting to be alone for eternity. But the old god of darkness stayed in the shadows, plotting the downfall of the new gods.
This old god of darkness had been stripped of their title of god of darkness and was now simply the god of trickery and deceit. They were not too keen on that, but they embraced it fully.
For if they were simply known as "the nuisance", then they could take the gods by surprise.
They pretended to give in and joined the gods in their home.
The gods welcomed them, all except for the new god of darkness, who suspected them of trying to take back her position.
She was right, of course.
The god of deceit lived in the home of the gods for many years, once again fading into the background.
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Guess who just had ANOTHER idea for a book.
At 3 am Thursday morning.
About faeries.
A fantasy book, which I'm always intimidated by writing.
Guess who recently realised that she has a MAJOR PLOT KNOT!!!
The god of darkness was very suspicious of the god of deceit and tried to keep tabs on them at all times.
This was not going to work, though, because the god of deceit was a master of rellusion.
After a few years, the god of deceit began to mess with the other gods.
They replaced the other gods' food with illusions, just to see them try to take a bite of a sandwich and having it disappear.
They steal all their forks and make a crown out of them all, then parade around the streets wearing it.
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Hey, at least something good came out of it?
I'm kidding about the forks.
Guys I know literally everything I want to write in my book but I'm so scared to write it