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Basically, at times I have started stories at the end, sort of. The first chapter is at the end of the story and it has started to explain the world and stuff. But I am unsure what else to write, it is too short. I could just so a break in time. But I would rather do another chapter.
You say you start stories at the end, right? You could always go back closer to the beginning/middle of the story and write a new first chapter there, then just fill in what happens between the two chapters you wrote. If that makes any sense?
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Yeah, here is the chapter. all i have for the story
She layed in her pitch black armor with her platinum hair lifeless in the never dying wind. As an ominous tower loomed over her. The sky was dark and clouded with hot strikes of burning electricity shooting from the clouds. Ferocious roars boomed from up above but the people seemed clueless to the present details happening in their, oh so precious kingdom that struck all that entered with pain and misery. The kingdom named after the color of their peasant's and proficient's blood that was spilled in the name of treason. Their blood isn't spilled in the wrongful name of treason though, the tyrant king that rules this mess of a kingdom says that, so he may murder who he pleases without being questioned. They are killed because he fears his kingdom will one day rise up against him and use their power to rid their kingdom of him and his evil. But he only kills the ones that are threats like the mixed proficient sometimes he just kill the proficient that's abilities are strong but he never kills the non-proficient. The proficient's were people who possessed magical abilities or practiced magical abilities. The Crimson Kingdom though outlawed magic, they absolutely forbid it and even shunned it.
That seems really cool! I love the idea of Proficients and Non-Proficients. Am I correct in assuming that those titles are related to abilities of some sort?
I'm curious to know who the "she" is in the beginning, what's making the ferocious roars, and what's happening in the scene. Is the King killing people? Is there a war going on?
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Yeah, Basically I would be going back to the beginning in the next chapter and as it went all of those questions would be answered.
I don't know if I'd start there. I might have the first chapter be earlier in the story, and you can build up to this point. I think the concepts expressed in this paragraph are really good, but it's a lot of information for the very beginning of a story. While it is good to leave the reader with some questions that entice them to read further, if there are too many questions it can be confusing.
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Yeah, I agree. Though I was going to explain the fact there is in fact a war and other stuff in that first chapter. I was going to leave some of the other stuff to be answered as the story went on.
You could do that, for sure.
Ooh, I have an idea! (You don't have to do it, I'm just throwing it out there). Have you ever read La Passe-Miroir? The English title is A Winter's Promise (which irritates me because it's nothing close to the meaning of the original title, but that's unrelated).
It has this little bit, maybe half a page long, before the first chapter, like a tiny mini-prologue. You could take the beginning of your story, the description of the mysterious "she" and the storm, and stick it before your first chapter. I'd probably cut it off before the descriptions of the kingdom and the Proficients/Non-Proficients, and just give the readers a little taste of what will happen later in the book to intrigue them. Like a little flash-forward. The rest it, about the kingdom, etc. can probably be moved to the new first chapter.
(Side note, but if you haven't read A Winter's Promise, you should. The writing is fantastic).
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Alright. I may do that. Thanks.
Good luck with your story :)
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Thanks.
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Quick question. So I was wondering should the rest of the story from there be in 3rd POV or 1st POV. Like right there it is just in 3rd pov
Hi popping in!
I liked your excerpt a lot, and yes, it would be in 3rd POV. I would personally suggest keeping it there, in the safe clutches of 3rd, but it's up to you!
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Alright.
Like Emi said, I'd probably do 3rd person, but it's up to you :)
