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Cadence group

I really need help developing my book/series plot, I have a vague idea of the story but I have no idea where to start or end it. And if anyone could help, I suck at naming my stories.

@Celestial-Burst

I could try and help with plot if you would like!

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Cadence group

Really?! Thank you so much, when I get ideas they usually play out in my head in a way that doesn't make any sense, and nothing really stays concrete except maybe the people. That's why I asked is I have trouble understanding my own stories.

@Celestial-Burst

Ah I understand, its hard to be able to actually write out stories from the ideas in your head. What is your idea for the story so far?

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Cadence group

So far what I have is a 16 year old boy, the sixth child of some poor nobility in his country, feels inadequate. His oldest brother is smart, which he isn't. The next oldest is very strong, something else that the character is not. His older sister is very beautiful, and he is too in his own way but he just doesn't see it in himself. Anyway, the story is basically about this boy trying to prove himself to everybody, but along the way realizing that he is great in his own way. I know some of the things that I want to happen in the story, and I figured out an okay ending, but how to start the story is always hardest for me.

@Celestial-Burst

Hmm. Well you want to start the story in a way that introduces the character without straight up saying "this is _____, hes 16, the 6th child of poor nobility in his country, blah blah etc etc." lol. You also want to introduce the problem pretty early in the story as well to get the reader interested. Do you have an idea of maybe what you might possibly want? Or even what you don't want? Its good to exclude things and get them out of the way so you can focus more on the possibilities.

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Cadence group

I'm not sure what I want

@Celestial-Burst

Well, lol, thats going to make it a bit harder xD. Maybe you can start it with a smaller problem then introduces it into a larger problem in the story. Something that introduces the mcs personality and his situation? I don't know, just throwing out suggestions lol

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Cadence group

I want to introduce him during an active moment, like a conversation or something like that

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Cadence group

Otherwise I'm not sure

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Cadence group

I wrote the first chapter. Would you mind reading it and telling me your thoughts? I personally think that some paragraphs are pretty wordy, and I don't explain things very well, but please let me know what you think.
https://www.notebook.ai/documents/106630

@Celestial-Burst

Of course! Just give me a second to look through it!

@Celestial-Burst

It seems pretty good for being just a first draft and stuff! I think you can explain things a bit more, the pacing is a bit off, like the last couple of paragraphs. But other than that it seems not half bad!

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Cadence group

Thanks! Pacing is an issue I usually have. I'll get to work on improving it! :)

@Celestial-Burst

Good luck!

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Cadence group

I've caught a few mistakes, but I haven't made any major changes. If you don't mind, do you have any ideas on how to improve the pacing?

@Celestial-Burst

It seems very fast pace, so try adding more words and going into more detail with it!

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Cadence group

Ok thanks!

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Cadence group

I fleshed out the story a bit. I didn't do much but hopefully it helped. https://www.notebook.ai/documents/106630

@Celestial-Burst

Yes it seems a bit better!

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Cadence group

I think I have the (almost) final version of the chapter. https://www.notebook.ai/documents/106630

@Celestial-Burst

It looks good so far!

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Cadence group

I finished the draft for chapter two if you don't mind reading through it.
https://www.notebook.ai/documents/106882

@Celestial-Burst

It says I don't have permission to view it