Marki smiled shyly at Jane, " Yes, in fact we have to start your training right now. Now I want you to tell me your fears, JAne." He asked curiously.
"Um… ev-ev-everything? Um…. I don't even know wh-what's going on h-h-here."
"Ok.." He said slowly. This was going to be harder then he thought. "Now I want for you to think of someone you hate."
"Um…. nobody?"
"I guess the people who bully me but…. I want them to stop, not be given a taste of their own medicine." she said, touching a small scar on her cheek absentmindedly. Like it was a reflex. (More backstory later.)
Marki….. well they were having a problem now. "Jane your powers are fear and poison, their must be something…… do you have any family?"
"No…. foster mum…. well, I dunno. Everyone has family, I never knew mine."
( Abigail, everyone has someone they would die to protect, or else… well then it's not human, and everyone has someone they hate no matter who they are. )
( Abigail, everyone has someone they would die to protect, or else… well then it's not human, and everyone has someone they hate no matter who they are. )
(Unless you're a "I don't really hate people because everyone is capable of good and evil" type person)
( She at least must have SOMEONE she would die to protect thought.)
( She at least must have SOMEONE she would die to protect thought.)
(She's always being shunted around, so she never gets to know anyone well enough to care.)
(If not we can get her to die for someone in the group?)
(If not we can get her to die for someone in the group?)
(She's not going to die.)
( We have a major problem now.)
(Hey….uh Abigail? I know that you want to make your character struggle with understanding and accepting her powers, but it is getting to a point where it is stalling the story, not being helpful to her character arc. It almost seems like she is some kind of being without restrictions, echoing what Nerd said. I really want this story to be fun and entertaining for all involved, not having a bunch of people caught up on the same thing over and over. Not trying to be mean in the slightest, just telling you what I think. Please don't take it the wrong way. You chose for you character to have dark powers, not what some would consider good ones. Fear/Poison means Fear/Poison, not Strength/Healing. I am just speaking my mind, and if you ignore this it's fine. I just needed to get this off my chest.)
(I mean not die, but trust someone a lot where they fear for them. Or fear them.)
(Hey….uh Abigail? I know that you want to make your character struggle with understanding and accepting her powers, but it is getting to a point where it is stalling the story, not being helpful to her character arc. It almost seems like she is some kind of being without restrictions, echoing what Nerd said. I really want this story to be fun and entertaining for all involved, not having a bunch of people caught up on the same thing over and over. Not trying to be mean in the slightest, just telling you what I think. Please don't take it the wrong way. You chose for you character to have dark powers, not what some would consider good ones. Fear/Poison means Fear/Poison, not Strength/Healing. I am just speaking my mind, and if you ignore this it's fine. I just needed to get this off my chest.)
(Yeah don't worry I want to do a lot of character development in general.)
(But at the moment it is just stalling the story, not helping develop your character. That's what I am trying to say)
( Everyone has prejudices and someone they trust a lot.)
( Can you make up something so we can continue?)
(She doesn't have friends because she's always getting beat up. But she does care a lot about her foster mom.)
( Okie Dokie then lets use that.)
"Well… my foster mom. I dunno. I used to have a girlfriend, but she was shot by some hitmen." Janet said, barely speaking as loud as a whisper.
( Don't use I dunno, it makes it sound like you're not sure. BE SURE!)
( Sorry, No offense.)
(Jane is unsure of everything.)
(Ok, I can work with this.)
"So…. anything else?" she mumbled.
Marki waved his wand and created an illusion of her. " Now what would you do if this happened." He conjured up a knife and held it up to her face.
"Um…. be terrified?" she whispered.
