Critique my story?

I have part of a chapter (maybe) written out… actually, I have the whole chapter written, but I'm kinda shy to share all of it at once. So, I'd appreciate feedback on the first part of it at least ;; https://docs.google.com/document/d/1YZMcxDRzyVY_ja4J5Gsg-5GDVrj-8qgIPCe48HPGxQY/edit?usp=sharing

So far (I haven't read the entire thing) it seems really good. One note though:

"It was quiet inside the cottage, save for a young girl humming with voluminous, matte black hair as she hung bundles of herbs to a beam above the hearth."

This makes it sound like her hum has voluminous, matte black hair. Instead you could say

"It was quiet inside the cottage, save for a young girl with voluminous, matte black hair humming as she hung bundles of herbs to a beam above the hearth."