Critique my world and plot please!

@Relsey-TheElder 4 comments July 28, 2019

@Relsey-TheElder July 28, 2019

This is my baby, she has some plot holes, some typos, but if I could get some critiques on the over all thing I would appreciate it.

@Relsey-TheElder July 29, 2019

(bump)

@Reblod August 06, 2019

I meant to comment on this but it slipped my mind soo late reply

Honestly, I don't have anything to critique I just wanted to say that I really enjoyed reading all of this and it seems like a really cool world

@Relsey-TheElder August 06, 2019

Thanks @Reblod!