Started writing. Anyone willing to lend a hand? Or three?

Here's how it begins

It's great! I love this writing style. How Atalia knows of both worlds is cool. I have a character like that but, it's part of her powers and it only comes in short bursts.

I am really into it!

Atalia is the creator of the two worlds.

Oh, face palm sorry. That was dumb of me to say.

Don't worry. With how I wrote it, I can see how someone can make that mistake.

Okay, thank you. It is a great concept! By two worlds I thought you meant ours and the fictional, but they're both fictional, am I correct?

That is correct. One is like our own, but just a bit more advanced. Though not by very much.

Okay, that makes sense. Between the plot I am working on that contains our world and the fictional worlds and this one I got confused.