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So, basically, I have a story I wrote a few months ago (unfinished) and decided that I'd decide to try to improve it. Just wondering which start you like better. Second intro will be the first comment.
Intro #1
“Come on, Alix, wake up already! Wakeupwakeupwakeup!!!”
I wake up to the sound of my little brother Caleb’s voice. I rub my eyes and groan, then look at my clock.
“Aw come on, Caleb, it’s 6:30! Let me sleep!”
Caleb rolls his eyes as I try to sleep again. “You’re boring,” he groans.
An hour later, Caleb wakes me up by screaming some annoying rhymes he definitely spent the last hour writing to annoy me.
My mom hears this and yells, “Caleb! It’s your sister’s birthday, of all the days! Be nice to her!”
“But Mommy…” Caleb starts to whine, but Mom shushes him. “Shhh, Caleb. We have Alix’s birthday present! Isn’t she going to love it?”
“YEAH!” Caleb screams.