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Can anyone critique my main character for my first story

@CommanderSigurd forum 9 comments schedule
@CommanderSigurd

This is my first time making a story and all the things involved and using this site so can someone give me some pointers. If anyone's interested I have three other characters but this is my main concern. Thank you.

@@Wanheda

The profile is closed off. You'll have to open it so we can see.

@CommanderSigurd

Oh whoops didn't realize sorry

@@Wanheda

No problem. Let me know when its done.

@CommanderSigurd

Try now please

@@Wanheda
  1. I really like the name.
  2. I'm guessing the age is like that because he doesn't know about his past. One of my favorite characters picked his birthday out and chose the day that his adoptive father found him. Just a thought.
  3. Freelance has different fields. I would narrow it down.
  4. The base is good. I would get a little more specific in some areas and go into more detail.
@CommanderSigurd

Thank you, i'm terrible with names so I just use a generator and picked this one but I wasn't sure how people would find it

@@Wanheda

That's the one thing I'm really good at. lol I struggle every now and then. I've also developed a dislike of some names. It's like every story has a guy named Grant in it.

@CommanderSigurd

Lol yeah