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Can someone help me critique these?

@I.J.Green forum 2 comments schedule
@I.J.Green

Hi there folks! I am seeking aid for my new characters. I want them to seem very real for my play…its kind of dark and real. You can read one, two, or all six if you want. I just want to hear what others think!
Thanks in advance!!

@tyller_) (_woode

Kara Tylers - Side character? Maybe touching around the forearm too, that's what quite a few people do. Other than that, she's really well done, very thorough.