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Critique My Child

@Fraust I have premium? forum 10 comments schedule
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@WritingWizard

The link is private, if you change it I can look at your character.

@Fraust

Sorry! I fixed it

@@Rubyjane

Sounds good! Although I would add more detail all around. He sounds like a really fun character though!!

@Fraust

Thanks!

@neopetsadmin

omg he's adorablleee! i agree with a little more detail all around, but if he's just a casual character, he's great. i'm a little worried about how he's 85 pounds at 5'1, but if that's your character, that is your character

@Fraust

@neopetsadmin Whoops! Sorry! I meant to write 95, sorry for the confusion ^^;

Corinne

I like him! I also want to know more though like why he was moved to island 1578 and why his house burned down. He sounds super cool though!

@WritingWizard

He looks and sounds cool! If you add how long his hair is that might help with the description

@Fraust

Thanks for the advice :)