GIMME SOME CHARACTERS (to critique) (sorry that was aggressive)

I’m in the mood for some characters to judge.

I have one

Alice I guess

Take a look at my boyo?

This bitch is ready to be judged Elvira Wright Eddington

I got one but just a warning that he's still a work in progress XDD i don't even know where im going with this guy

Why was he all cocky as a teen? Why doesn’t he like being reminded of people who call him those nicknames? Can you put in some information about his family? Does he have anxiety? (Since you said “when he gets anxious”)

I have one

It’s good but maybe add a bit more information into a lot of things. The more information the bettter. Aside from that it’s really good. Also maybe add some stuff about family.

Alice I guess

That’s great. Nothing to critique honestly. I don’t know what to say other then it’s great!

Take a look at my boyo?

Maybe put what type of chocolate he likes? Other then that I love how much detail you put into this. Have a great time with your boyo.

This bitch is ready to be judged Elvira Wright Eddington

Remember to check spellings e.g. traitor. “Simple home cooked meal” that is a very broad term. I like spaghetti and Hoki fish but I don’t like Shepard’s pie. See? Rarely anyone if no one likes all homemade dishes. Other then that it’s all good!

I’m so, so sorry for the wait. School really hates me.

you're fine, my dude

@Wheeze_For_Me
Please help
Be as harsh as you possibly can
destroy him
idc
make me cry if you have to

here you go, just some context, think 18th-century Celtic regions but with all the folklore

I see this thread has re-surfaced from the depths haha, don't know if you're still taking requests but: Gerel She hasn't been critiqued before, and I would really appreciate it! Thank you ^o^