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Help me with my character please?

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Jack

I know I've spent a lot of time on this character, but I'd like a second set of eyes because I know if my character isn't written well then my full writing won't be understandable. So if y'all could point out any confusing points or flaws I'd really appreciate it. Thanks! :) https://www.notebook.ai/plan/characters/247657#gallery_panel

@AJMaskell

I would love to check out your character, but the link wouldn't work, it just took me back to the home page

@Raziel Gallephraya

The link isn't working but if you could get another link I would be glad to check it out

@Natasha

The link didn't work but I would love to check it out.

Jack

Sorry, I didn't check it. Does this one work?? Sorry… Dmitri Airen

@Raziel Gallephraya

Are you sure you made it public? it's probably still on private and don't worry it's okay

Jack

Oh, sorry! I thought I had made it public. I forgot, but I changed it so it should work now

@Raziel Gallephraya

This is a very well thought out and in-depth character, so much so I don't believe that there's anything I could really find that could help you with him. I love all of the details you've used and it really shows that you understand this character a lot and that's really cool. If you really want help with something you can totally point it out and I can try my best to help you! I really do like this character though.