I'm looking at @CinnamonRoll and @Mish because you all were really helpful before and I need help with this new character. That doesn't mean that nobody else can comment!
Here's the character:
You can roast me to the ground if you want XD
Hey guys, can anyone critique?
Sorry I'm not the best at critiquing, but I just wanted to say that your story seems very good, and your characters are interesting to match. Good job with your character!