Notebook.ai

I willl critique characters, holding nothing back(don't be offended if I say every ugly opinion I have ;))

@rachelnebby forum 6 comments schedule
@rachelnebby

I am super picky and stuff and I will scrutinize your characters from every angle (good or bad)

@AJ

Do your worst- I want to improve my protag

@painters_tape

Hit me.

Matthias

Go for it

@rachelnebby

@AJ Here you go

She sounds like a really cool, bada** girl, and I love her backstory. However, here are some questions/thoughts:
-Where does she live/operate?(Probably moves around a lot, but still)
-You mentioned she is a revolutionary, does this mean that she has fought in the wars, or just watched by the sidelines?
-Does she have any human friends/has she ever had a hard time bringing a soul to the afterlife?
-Love interests or no?
-Does she have nightmares/PTSD? Is she comfortable with her job?

Yeah so that’s what I got, it’s probably not a very good analysis, but I’m doing this to get better at it, sooooooo . . . yup.

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