i would love to hear your thoughts on my world and my main character

i can't see it

It's on private, can you change it to public?

try now

It's kind of hard to judge a character without knowing his personality, his motivations, his relationships, etc…

Frankly, I have to agree with Sarah. Fill out fields! Even if they seem useless, they provide valuable insight into the character. Without knowing Jason's motivations, personality, prejudices, etc, I find it very hard to visualize him. Fill him out more, then repost! I'd be happy to critique him then!! :D