Zinnia

@SupernaturalSyGuyIsFreezingToDeath So, the first part of your story I'm going to go over is the prologue. I think this part is the shakiest out of the whole story. The ideas it portrays are in...

@kakito-len I liked the story, and the characters served it well to make it work. I think that the setting was rather lacking, however. There were many missing details that got overlooked or es...

@Kaloobia I think it's perfectly fine to have multiple pronouns like that, but I was mostly basing that off of the stated preference being only they/them. I've seen people accidentally use he or he...

@SupernaturalSyGuyIsFreezingToDeath Since it is fairly long, it'll be a while before I can read it over to give a proper criticism. I'll probably divide it by chapters or segments when I do go over...

@Kaloobia I take any writing critique requests, so sure thing. He's a solid character with a good balance between his flaws and strengths, at least based off of this profile. The only thing I would...

@kakito-len Yes, of course. Just send me the document and tell me what type of criticism you want (as in wanting the content as a whole looked over, like plot and characters, and/or more picky gram...

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1KezxqW6u_lRMi0JP9RbfmutJGwjy_xcyr8SF1dJDy6U/edit?usp=sharing Here is a document going into the editing. I typically focus on grammar and flaws with this, so ...

Are you wanting help with editing or constructive criticism? I will gladly offer either.

@Spider-man ^^

So, in terms of the premise, I think it has potential. Futuristic settings have a lot of room to go in a lot of different directions, whether it be exploring what happened to cause the world to cha...