Nicole L

After literally 2 years since posting this and about 1.5 years of inactivity, I suddenly remembered about this site's existence, and about the time I posted my attempt at a first chapter on its for...

Aw, thank you very much!

Yeah I'm purposely trying to incorporate a flaw into the system, since the second-in-line could easily be a horrible ruler (which does eventually happen because plot), which forces a change in gove...

Thank you! I was a bit worried about it, so I'm glad you like the concepts ^^

Yeah, I thought about that. I've been focusing a bit more on the political side of things and less so on the cultural parts. Though, I guess the main thing is that different groups worship the spir...

I guess the biggest change I've made to my story is the setting (and basically the entire plot). It started off as a high fantasy where one of the characters travels back in time to prevent the dea...

Ok so a bit of background: this story takes place in a universe where practically everyone can use a limited form of magic that uses runes. Limited, because everyone only has a certain amount of en...

(Sorry about the late reply) Thank you so much for critiquing this mess of a first draft! I've been kind of stuck on what to do, so thanks for some much needed commentary. Anyway yeah I totally s...

Could you maybe critique my main character? I could really use an expert opinion: https://www.notebook.ai/plan/characters/381996

Rip it apart, I dare you. Ezra Hartwell considered himself a perfectly functioning member of society, thank you very much. He had almost completed his apprenticeship under one of the best apothe...