Lauren

Oh my gosh!!! That's cool! I hope you're not going stir crazy! >“this is the first time someone has…. loved me like this. Quietly, softly, just for the sake of it.” NO THIS DESTROYED ME....

Woah! I think this is the first time i've understood the scope of the story you've been showing me! this is so cool! okay i only saw a couple issues: here >Heartbroken and furious at being go...

OMG I SHOULDA BEEN CHECKING I SHOULDA BEEN HERE AHHHH!!! I already glanced over it and I love the last two lines. Idk if you still need a critique or not but I will read it for my own enjoyment ei...

AHHHHH holy shit that last little snippet got me for sure!! So good!!!! Ugh not me being so emotionally invested in this :D okay on the long snippet of Nati talking to Mari, you start out wit...

Woah!! I really really like it!! Full of enough intentional vagueness to be intriguing and some just killer lines. like **She was perhaps the most important nobody in the entire land.** ? ama...

Hmmm I think it'll depend on how you spin it to the audience. If you try and fake us out for a long period of time that she's dead and play up the angst on that and then it turns out she's alive ...

Gosh, I love the soul magic system! It looks like you've got it all pretty worked out. It's the overview and general synopsis need some work--things that need to be explained better and sentence st...

Both of you made me cackle! @Starfast @drying-on-a-clothes-line-sock

Hi hi! Sorry I'm late to respond! let's jump right on in! overall, I liked it! The tone was that of a happy coming of age YA. That being said, overall it was very low stakes. no conflict was ...

AWWW!! they're adorable omg!! It kinda wanted the moment to hang on longer even, at the end there. "The opposite was happening to me" could be drawn out a bit, and we could get a better picture...