I'LL CRITIQUE YOUR CHARACTERS!! [STILL OPEN]

Okay, thanks so much!

Sorry it has taken me so long to respond. I like to respond to feedback because i want people to have the best understanding they can of my characters and so people can correct me on why i have done something with my character if that makes sense. Okay so starting from the top.
1 Sorry about the hyphenation i just haven't come up with his second name. apologies a lot of this is notes that I forgot i had written and hadn't corrected if that makes sense. the notes apply to a lot of your critiques so bear with me.
2 So the weight was just an error in my judgement sorry about that. The height however in my town is pretty common even for 15 yr olds so that is why he is so tall and because i want him to start in the area.
3 Yeah this is another of the notes thing. i haven't 100% decided and the note was there for me more than anyone else sorry.
4 Again this was just an error in my judgement i will change that.
5 so with his tattoos or tattoo depending on what i decide i haven't 100% decided so if you have an ideas that would be great. i was thinking along the lines of runes of some kind sorry if i am being to uncertain.
6 As far the bok goes it is kind of an exaggeration but yes he carries one around in his bag most of the time. how he treats people is not really influenced by peoples rank more how they treat him and their views. with his personality i meant to add more before i asked people to critique but it slipped my mind.
7 the trying to make a difference is in the world but he starts with the people around him. sorry i didn't specify again one of my notes. apologies again.
8 i am in the process of rewording that paragraph but i forgot to put it in again before i asked people to critique but thank you for the ideas on who to phrase it.
9 what i am trying to say is his pride is hurt more if people are around when he fails so this makes it easier but not easy to admit defeat when he is alone.
10 again i was in the process of rewording but thank you for the idea on how to phrase it i like it.
11 yes he is a musical prodigy but he is also quite smart intellectually just not a prodigy.
12 sorry about the tense of the words as i said earlier i needed to check it before hand but i was very tired.
13 with his personality i was once again in the process of adding more to his personality but it didn't save unfortunately.
14 okay so with his sexuality i agree i should have made it clearer. what i meant was he is homo-flexible but identifies as bi because he believes labelling himself gay ignore a piece of himself if that makes sense.
15 sorry again phrasing. what i meant was especially when it is cooked on the raclette but adding it to hobbies is a great idea i will do that.
16 silly mistake. apologies and why he loves them is for their LGBT+ representation. he also likes the story and world but that is a big part of the reason why.
17 the blades are on both ends and once again haven't decided but have ideas.
18 he likes cats because they take care of themselves, they don't bark and he just finds them more calming and loving than a dog but he doesn't hate dogs.
19 okay for two reasons. one i don't know if i want him to speak welsh and two i want him to travel a lot and i want him to make use of the languages he has and if he is speaking those languages or someone is speaking them to him i want to know more about the language and how to speak it.
20 when i said start i meant star of the story. i knew what i was talking about so it didn't occur to me that people would get confused because i didn't check over it beforehand.
21 wooops i change who his brother was in my head but not on the sheet. also once again i am very wordy a lot of the time so thank you for seeing that.
22 i agree mostly. once again i am just being wordy i am sorry about that. however the reason i said property is because i want him to live on some acreage.
23 he was bullied because he was a bit of a nerd and a bit different because he was friends with the girls instead of the boys.
24 yes i agree i need to add more thanks for picking that up.
25 again me being kind of wordy thanks for picking up on that.
26 yeah i wanted him to have an interesting blood type to go along with his magic not that they really connect but maybe that is something i could explore.
Thank you so much for your feedback i really appreciate it even if my feedback makes it seem like i don't. also sorry it is so long i didn't expect me to go so in depth.

lol glad i could help! my suggestion would be to put a lot of that in your actual character description (obviously avoiding the general 'you' or 'I') so that you don't have to respond, but you do you :)) good luck!

ok Darkblossom
so i did my best! i critiqued it a bit like i would normal characters so just disregard anything that you don't want to listen to lol

1. so i know a lot of people like to add semi-unnatural markings to cats when writing fiction stories about them, but personally i would be more inclined to make them a more natural shape/color (e.g. blue-grey stripes) though this could be personal preference.
2. sort of relating to the above, if you're trying to make it super accurate, i don't really know if cats would know what glitter is. i might be more inclined to say something like sparkling or shimmering (because those are descriptors), but again it's up to you
3. you say her "unique" ability. does that mean she shares other abilities with others of the magic trio? list them all! also, what exactly is the mega healing light? is it just a healing light that she can use to heal others'/her own wounds? elaborate.
4. her personality is pretty good, but make it more in-depth. deep down, is she truly happy or is she a bit sad? does she have an internal conflict? what rubs her the wrong way? stuff like that. the little details can actually help you (not just others) get to know your character better.
5. hobbies - what else? what does she do when she can't run/race?
6. very good at magic - what kind? you've stated before that she has unique abilities and is good at teleportation. maybe you could shift the latter to the talents section.
7. prejudices - add some more, if she has any. it is definitely understandable why she would dislike those kinds of people/cats, but add any sweeping generalizations she may have made to this category. if she doesn't like a certain group for a reason that might only apply to some of them, add that.
8. so flaws: instead of the first part, just say she's a bit reckless. might just be easier to say. also, being passive-aggressive is very different from "finds ways to get back at you" - passive-aggressive is more of an in-the-moment descriptor, when she is arguing with someone for example, whereas the last part might suggest she is revengeful as well as passive-aggressive.
9. so for motivations, if she goes on a quest or journey or some path on which she will grow as a character, why should she? what will motivate her to do so? i don't think defending her friends would necessarily mean the same thing as protecting them, which might be a stronger motive in that scenario.
10. what occupation does Sparkling Creek have? are they a fighter? what exactly is Glitter Moon training to be?
11. so when i read politics i kind of understand the above, but maybe you could put "training to be a future leader" under occupation instead of politics. i'm not entirely sure cats have politics. if there are separate groups (which the section suggests) which group does she lean more towards believing in an argument? that could be her political views.
12. what does the basic schooling teach the Spirit Kits?

i like the drawing :3 it's cute
anyways that's all! she's a good character and obviously you don't have to follow up with any of the above if you don't want to. nice work!

Can you critique my character? I'd like to get better at building personalities so if you could help and say everything that comes to mind that would be great. Invalid Character

ok so!

1. role: i think assassin is more of an occupation. role is like, is she the protag? the antag? a side character? stuff like that.
2. maybe explain how she got the scars before where they are, because i was a bit confused as to why they were "earned". normally scars are "gained", and even that's being positive. they aren't a good thing. i love how you've written that in though, but maybe go for a bit more of a concise explanation and add some more identifying marks in!
3. "A dishonor amount assassin's only those who have failed and returned in shame are buried. " i'm confused as to what this means. also, the sentence/explanation is getting a bit long at this point, so maybe just put some explanation in the Notes category.
4. "Hourglass
   thin
   athletic
   muscled" those don't go together. i get maaaybe hourglass if it's genetic, but if she's an assassin she's going to be strong and muscled and thin is not a descriptor for those who are muscled.
5. hair style: wouldn't she keep it up in a pony tail if she's "on the job"?
6. she's a bit underweight for her body type… i see this a lot. muscle weighs more than fat. if she's muscly, she'll weigh more than expected but be quite healthy.
7. so for personality, i understand what ESTP-A is, but others might not. explain it a bit and add some details. she's not going to be cookie-cutter perfect and fitting that personality type in every way.
8. that's quite a lot of hobbies. how does she have time for them all?
9. "nationalism
   classism
   smart vs less smart" clarify it a bit. what about them makes them prejudices for her? why are they her prejudices?
10. if she's received the kind of rigorous training expected for an assassin, i kind of doubt she has that many flaws. she would probably have had them groomed out of her extensively. especially "flirt
    hard
    hypocritical". how is she hypocritical? what does hard mean?? if she's an assassin why is she flirting at all???? and audacious. she almost certainly would not be.
11. "the challenge
    glory seeker
    peace seeker" what challenge. also, she's an assassin why would she seek peace and if she actually does, why would she become an assassin?
12. "Crosses arms across chest when trying to appear alarming" i would personally say this shows more disinterest than clasping the hands behind the back. it basically means lack of tolerance or annoyance. to appear alarming, i would say "glaring daggers" or shifting her weight and changing her attitude to a more threatening one.
13. "Taps or drum fingers when impatient or rocks back and forth on heels in private
    bits lip when unsure " so it depends what kind of training she received, but assassins will know how to control this stuff. if they're infiltrating some place they are going to know exactly how to act and know what to do if something goes wrong. the only reason i'm saying this is i don't entirely know if she drums her fingers and rocks back and forth only when in private or she drums her fingers in public and only rocks back and forth when in private.
14. "She was confronted at 15 by cloaked man telling her to follow him or not the choice was hers. Sophia followed him not because she wanted to escape her life but because she was curious" this is a bit confusing. at first i thought you meant he told her to follow him and that the choice wasn't hers. and you haven't mentioned background before that so i don't know why she'd just abandon everything to escape her life (what was it like).
15. "He led her to the Assassins guild where she stayed for the next 5 years out of 50 students 8 graduate the others having been killed or captures for spying or attempted assassination by the law enforcements of different countries" bit run on, just a heads up, cuz it was just a tiny bit hard to decipher.
16. so for education, you said she was taken at 15. that means she must have had some sort of public or private education before that. was she attending high school?

so that's all. she's pretty good, but depending on what kind of assassin training she received its hard to tell how much of that personality would still be there.
good luck!

Ok, thank you so much! This was very helpful.

Hi! I'm working on a novel and this is my main character. Be as harsh as you need, (I'd really like to make her believable) and thank you so much!!

hiiii!
here you go!

1. main - what? protag? antag? i can kind of get that she's the protag, but still. you never know who might not!
2. more identifying marks. maybe to help with concision just say "an accidental injury when she was little."
3. "Body type of someone who doesn't eat 3+ times a day; but still gets enough and has muscle tone. Her bone structure is somewhat prominent" so you've made it more accurate than some other disasters i've seen, but still, if she's muscled, you're going to see the muscle. she may not look like her job requires a lot of heavy lifting but still looks strong. i can do 40 push ups and while i may be petite, i have the arm muscles to prove it.
4. "but gets some pink in the summer more than the winter (despite her country being hot all year)" what does this mean? i'm confused. does she get pink in both the summer and the winter and is it different from her tan? why is that "despite her country being hot all year"?
5. i'm not even sure if violet is a real eye color. if it is then it's really, really, obscenely rare. what are the chances that she has it and why should she? what makes it important in your story for her to have a rare eye color?
6. 135 is really small for someone who's job requires heavy lifting. look more at 160-ish. it may seem quite light, but i say this every time, muscle weighs more than fat.
7. very detailed personality!! thank you for adding the details other than just the letter personality type!
8. add some more hobbies! what does she do when she can't do pottery?
9. "knife skills" what knife skills. like close-combat fighting or cooking?
10. i think pride isn't a flaw, but being prideful is. also, "Calls herself a "realist", but leans more toward pessimism most cases." wouldn't really call pessimism a flaw unless it's debilitating to herself or others.
11. if her motivation is money, would she perhaps be greedy?
12. and bragging rights. does this mean she is a bit arrogant or views herself as better than others?
13. why do her eyes flash? does she have powers?
14. if her motivation is money, i find it a bit hard to believe that she would give away something for (even if it is her favorite) food. if the parts she finds are valuable, she'd probably be able to get 4 times the amount of mykre for the amount of money she gets.
15. background - ok, but what turned her into the person that she is today other than her (unknown!) history?

so that's all. she's pretty good! i love how detailed her personality is. however, i'd watch out for the cliche on her backstory. good luck!

Thank you sooooooo much @SpoopyPotato !!!! This is so helpful!! ^^

Aight @IOnlyHave1Project:
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ANYWAYS!

1. "Crea" by whom/why? i don't really see a correlation between the nickname and her actual name.
2. "(This is used in a mocking or friendly way depending on the person and manner in which used)" don't really think you need to add this. ur choice tho!
   2.5 another note pertaining to the above, "sister" and "old friend" could be just implied through the way you write the story, so you don't necessarily need to put that in the other names category. like i said, its ur choice!
3. "unless future events call for it" this is kind of just me wondering but what does this mean? does it mean when you write the story? in which case i would recommend just adding it so you as the author can get a better sense of her actions and general character.
4. so her tail is a tiny bit confusing. maybe say similar to a lion's tail. lions basically have long tails with a tuft of fur on the end. however, if she's a kitsune, then wouldn't her tail be similar to that of a fox? you've also said she shape-shifted to a humanoid feline. foxes are more related to canines, and i think they are vulpines, though i could be wrong. you could just say she's a vulpine humanoid.
5. her body type is pretty detailed and makes sense with her weight. nice job! just one thing tho, i'm sure she has some muscles. if so, maybe put that in too!
6. more identifying marks. what makes her stand out in a picture (other than being. a fox)? what makes her different from others? how would someone find her in a crowd? stuff like that.
7. mannerisms are really good too, but how does her magic act up? what exactly does it do? also, relating to this, her age might help understand why she does stuff like this, but that's just me. and why is she not quite up to date with the latest slang?
8. motivations: "puts more responsibility than necessary" on herself? you didn't clarify. also, has she only come to know her friends because of their hardships? i don't really believe that. if she wants to protect them because they've already been through some hardships, that's a bit different, so put that.
9. "others betraying or knowing too much about her" so these are two entirely different things and seem to deserve a little more than one snippet of a sentence. address them separately. why is she so worried about them betraying her? if by chance the two do relate to one another, how would betraying her be similar to knowing too much about her? why does she hide stuff? things like that.
10. if she "won't pick a fight but wouldn't enjoy the company" of someone like that, it's not quite a prejudice. a prejudice is an unfounded hate for an often wrongly generalized (on the individual's part) group of people. if it's a prejudice, it's a prejudice, but adding the above just doesn't make it seem like a prejudice. also, it's totally understandable to dislike someone like that. give her a real prejudice!
11. "She's gotten good at doing tricks with her magic, as she messes with it whenever she's bored. " what kind of magic tricks?
12. i don't think you need to add "claiming to have". she either has or she hasn't. "claiming to have" would be if you're writing this from the perspective of another character who doesn't know (probably like. first or third person limited lmao)
13. "The magic she is skilled in is illusion magic, though she also has a knack for knowing the time." so put this up by the magic tricks part, unless its different; but it still doesn't really make sense to separate them.
14. if she messes with her magic when she's bored, it's a hobby! add that in! also, "She sketches in her notebook for magic purposes, may be seen flipping through an old journal"what magic purposes? and what do you mean "may be seen"? does she have an old journal she likes to flip through, and what is it of?
15. "While she is genuine with any want she shows in being your friend, it becomes apparent throughout her arc she's is a liar. " the sentence structure makes it seem that she doesn't genuinely want to be one's friend. if that's true, add "looks genuine". if it's not, maybe put the liar part first and then the genuine part. also, if she's a liar, that's a flaw!
16. "Ori may love having friends or family to protect but she is generally nervous about others knowing anything besides the basics of who she is and will prevent others from getting to close to her. " this is just a bit confusing. how does she love having people to protect but want to push them away? why does she not like them knowing who she is? it's hard to be friends with someone you don't know much about.
17. "Oridone will brush off questions about her past or tap/twitch her fingers as a sort of nervous tic. " so this means that she will either brush off the questions or just tap her fingers, ignoring the person. is that true? clarify. also, tapping her fingers is a mannerism i think! (because its something that happens when she talks and stuff.
18. "Though she does often show her caring nature she can be unbelievably cold or harsh when making tough decisions, displaying questionable morals in some of her choices." if she wants to protect people, i'm a bit confused as to what kind of morals would be questionable. just what kinds of decisions is she making to completely disregard the caring nature and want to protect people?
19. dang you're an amazing artist h e c c cc
20. "her second outfit, not bothering to dress up for most events." what is her second outfit? do you mean the wrap shirt? maybe link the two by just saying "see the below" or something similar. also, do you mean joggers as in sweatpants or joggers as in leggings? because sweatpants might get caught on branches or something if she's climbing trees. it kind of depends what kind of story is going on for what kind of clothes she's going to have, so i'm not the best at critiquing this kind of stuff, but if she's somewhere with access to more than two outfits, she'll probably have more than two. you could say those are her favorites, though. idk

anyways that's all! she's an amazing character really, just needs a spot of clarification here and there.
great job!! also i've already said this but that art is really goooood

Thank you sooooooo much @SpoopyPotato !!!! This is so helpful!! ^^

np it's my pleasure!!

Ok @EveningPrimRose:

1. are the colors in her hair clearly separated or do they bleed into one another like an ombre?
2. hair style - does she wear it up at all? exactly how long is it?
3. "the Loners of Evenlee. They have dark power and some have wings that can appear and disappear at will" maybe put this part in notes. but what kind of dark power?
4. "Thin, top-hourglass body shape, athletic" mostly people who are athletic will not have an hourglass body shape or be thin. they'll have abs and muscles but still look just as great as those with the kind of overused and inaccurate hourglass figure :/
5. so what are whips wings? i get how you've explained it, but maybe explain it as "her unique wing structure - though similar to the other SoulEater's wings' anatomy, her wings have no feathers and are simply thick, translucent skin stretched between bones" if that's what they're like. just. wording i guess.
   also, add more identifying marks!
6. "She occasionally blinks hard and intensely, giving the illusion that she has trouble concentrating or staying awake." occasionally - like randomly or is it set off by a trigger? and add more. how does she speak? mannerisms are kind of how you talk to people. does she gesticulate a lot? does she talk differently to those of higher/lower status than her? stuff like that.
7. motivations - forgive me, but i don't quite believe that those could be her only motivations (especially without knowing whom it's for). no one's that perfect. just adding the freedom and equality of ___ would make it more believable.
8. flaws - clarify! maybe add some more! what would cause conflict between her and another character (only if it's her fault)?
9. "ourcasting her kin" - kin or race or what? why did they do that? clarify a bit more to make it seem more like a prejudice, though its pretty good right now (she's generalizing a group of people and disliking them for something perhaps not all of them did).
10. "Despite being a deep-thinker, she usually tends to act before her thoughts appear." depending on the situation, this could be a flaw. is she reckless?
11. "Although she is a relatively peaceful person, she has proved herself to be a war machine. With her Dead Magic and Creation power combined, she could destroy entire cities. In the midst of battle, she is known to show no mercy." i feel like "merciless" could be a flaw. if she's introverted yet like this, perhaps there's some moral issue here. most introverted/peaceful people i know would be upset if (god forbid) they ever hurt a fly.
12. So is Evenlee a place or a person? i'm a bit confused by some of the wording from other categories vs. the "Evenlee's ring" thing.
13. is Wolvic a species or a name? and if she was a slave, how did she have it/how did it escape with her? if she goes on a quest like so many characters do, does it come with her and how?
14. general question if she has dark powers and wings and can fly and can destroy motherhugging cities how did she accept her role as a slave. how did she even become a slave. never mind i saw the reason
15. education - advanced what? if she's a slave there's probably not going to be much of an education depending on when she became a slave?
16. so. uh."Her tribe is outcasted by the Supremes. Everrose sold herself into slavery so her parents could take better care of her little brothers, Aspender and Carpen and unborn baby boy (if Sage becomes a girl later don't add this) Sage (Who was later renamed Clara-Sage, after finding out she was a girl). She is a slave to the Outlanders, working to find Evenlee’s Ring in the mountains around the Outlander's border, where said Ring is believed to be hidden. She used her years in slavery to figure out a flawless plan to escape and return to her family." her tribe of SoulEaters? are the Outlanders looking for the ring or was she (and possibly other slaves) looking for it alone? if she went into slavery to help her parents take care of her brothers/sister, why would she be planning to return to them the minute she left? did she find the ring (cuz its in her possession)? what is its significance? did she return to her family? where is she now? basically, what events led to her current position?
17. so you put "pet wolvic" in pets and favorite animal. i don't think her favorite animal could be one specific animal, even if it's her pet. if her fave animal is a wolvic, put that in favorite animal along with its description, and just leave "pet wolvic" (and what's its name? gender? things like that) in the pet category.

so that's it. she's pretty good, but some things could still be explained/detailed more. other than that great job!

Would you please critique my main protagonist? I need her to be solid, so be as absolutely harsh as necessary.

Hey @Overdoneyanoveltropeyesplease i don't have permission to view her! sorry!

Figured it out

thanks!
so:

1. her role is a bit confusing. how are support and co-hero different? do you mean sidekick? and if she got turned into a villain later, chances are she will have enough info on the main hero to do some serious damage. i wouldn't say she's "low key" a villain. at least clarify it a bit
2. ur identifying marks are pretty vague. also, what torture?? add identifying marks other than the scars - what makes her stand out in a crowd/group photo? how does one recognize her (before and after whatever situation she was in)?
3. "Short, but curvy" clarify more! is she more muscular or does she have a bit of fat (nothing wrong with that, obviously)?
4. i don't even know if lavender is an eye color. check that out i think. but if it is, why should she have it? is it just protagonist perks?
5. "Mid length curly bed head look" do you mean curly? frizzy? if she's a hero sidekick, she's probably going to tie it up to avoid it getting in her face.
6. hair - is it natural or does she dye it?
7. "Like, 5’2” just say. is she 5'2. also, 155 is a bit heavy, so it leads me to believe that she's less muscular. the only reason i'm wondering about this is if she's an action/crime-fighting superhero then she's going to have a bit of muscle and probably be less curvy. it depends what kind of story she's in tho LOL
8. "Electrical" manipulation is very different from brain wave manipulation, unless you mean like the electromagnetic radiation manipulation. that includes brain waves.
9. add more personality! what is she like with new/old friends? how does she act when she's alone/with friends?
10. what hobby is music? listening to it? composing it?
11. "She’s good at all of the above, but she also has the ability to manipulate electrical waves/signals/pulses (including electrical brain waves)" k so i don't think you can put this if she's good at. watching tv. and sleeping. and music, whatever that means. also, you've already stated she has the ability, so if she's good at it, say that.
12. "Not very subtle" what does this mean
13. "her need to be accepted" by whom and why? why does that motivate her?
14. "Talks with hands a lot" gesticulates? also, makes crazy faces - why?
15. background - MOOOOORE. what happened in her history and why did it result in who she is today?
16. education - you mean up to high school, right? did she get her diploma?

ok that's it. my only advice is to add more details and clarify her! otherwise she's pretty great!

Great! Thank you so much. Some of the stuff you were confused on is stuff that I have more info for in my head, but it’s good to know that I need to make sure it’s clear when I write. It’s also good to know what makes sense to me, but not so much from a different perspective so I can find a way to clearify what I mean. So, thank you so much for your time! ❤️

Woooo I have a squad of cool girls and I kinda love them <3 If you have time, a look-over on their drafts could be cool?
Thanks so much <33333

Main character, Eleanor: Invalid Character
Second main character and possible love interest, Panya: Invalid Character
Third main character, Min: Invalid Character

They're not perfect yet but I'm trying my best ;DD hehe

This is my first character design, and i just joined this website like 5 minutes ago. She's a little character I drew, and I didn't put in a lot of info bc i'm not finished w her fam:

ok @mellowlynea, sorry it took me so long!
for Eleanor:

1. her looks, body type, stuff like that all seems accurate. nice job. watch her body type though - don't know how small her shoulders will be if she's muscled. maybe clarify her hairstyle a bit - what does it look like when it's not in plaits?
2. more identifying marks!!
3. her mannerisms are good, but remember they are a manner of speaking as well. "She braids her hair every morning to keep it tidy - when she can. " that would be super great clarification for her hair style!
4. so i always hate critiquing the motivations because i don't know the storyline, but perhaps clarify how "spite, justice, and adventure" motivate her (perhaps for different things).
5. "and quite moody when she's in deep thought or gets interrupted" though i totally understand that, i would say "moody" isn't quite the word you're looking for in such a specific situation. try "bitter" or just annoyed to be broken from her thoughts.
6. k so she seems pretty accurate, but for 13 some of the traits seem just a bit. uh. old for her? it depends on what this academy is, because it sounds like some sort of rigorous assassin's academy or something. otherwise, at her age, i wouldn't expect her to know all of those fighting techniques and languages. is she rich? in which case she might have gotten tutoring for them.
7. so after reading the background i kind of see - but add some dates/ages in there. it's hard for me to tell the timeline. how would a catholic school react to the association learning to fight? and the girls' backgrounds? and how did she learn all the backgrounds? how does she know about her parents?

for Panya:

1. "A constantly red nose, often rosy cheeks." how? why? add more!
2. so you've mentioned a few times that she has boyish traits, but i thought you said Min Song was the tomboy. also, if she's a potential love interest, then you may want to describe her as "butch" if that's what you mean she is. not sure how the catholic school would react though.
3. "Bapized as Russian Orthodox, doesn't spend much time debating religion." so why is she at the catholic boarding school? or that could be just this ignorant athiest talking. i don't know much about religion, sorry.
4. "slender" this contradicts the first two body type descriptors you've put..
5. more mannerisms! how does she talk to people? mannerisms are basically behaviors and manners of speaking unique to the individual.
6. motivations - success on what/whose terms? approval by whom? do you mean what she believes to be morally correct or what would help people (for example the latter might be more inclined to take more extreme routes with less remorse).
7. "Beneath that she is a sweet girl; her humour is a bit morbid, and often reflects her tendency to think ahead and worry, often seeing the pessimistic side of things" kind of confusing. if you're saying something is beneath a facade, you don't say "sweet girl" because that just upholds the facade. as well as this, not sure if a morbid sense of humor (humour is the verb form believe it or not, i just found that out LOL) can reflect her tendency to think ahead and worry. also, to clear up that last bit (because it's not related), i think you could just say she often sees the pessimistic side of things.
8. "She trusts easily" contradicts the fact that she's overly cautious
9. "She speaks in a rather loud, hasty way, lightly accented by her native Russian." that's a mannerism! nice details tho. add just a bit more in personality. you can never have too much!
10. "grey and white, sneakers," so is this supposed to be together or
11. all in all watch out for when you say she's "boyish" but have her put up a facade of being a perfect goody two-shoes and stuff.

For Min:

1. "long, straight, bangs" kind of sounds like her bangs are long and straight, maybe just clear that up a bit :,)
2. more identifying marks! i say this for literally every critique, but how would you recognize her in a group photo or crowd? (this goes for the previous two characters as well).
3. "and rarely remembers to clean up the empty cans." do you mean she just throws them on the ground when she's done drinking them? is this in her room? in which case does she do this in public as well?
4. whatever they're doing, why is she doing it for fun? (motivations)
5. i would personally put "downright disrespectful to authority figures" in flaws, as that could get her into serious trouble depending on who it is.
6. what does the "streetfighting scene" and "freerunning scene" mean? just me wondering
7. LOVE. her personality.
8. is Lan older or is Xing older?
9. "allies" is people on her side, "alleys" is like a space between buildings. LOL

so that's all! again, sorry it took so long! they're pretty good, with just a bit of room for nitpicky details. good luck!

This is my first character design, and i just joined this website like 5 minutes ago. She's a little character I drew, and I didn't put in a lot of info bc i'm not finished w her fam:

i can't access her! sorry! if you go into character settings you should see a toggle to make it public. that should do the trick. sorry again!

Caleb Sawyer Here is my group leader you can check out other members of the group if you want just go to his friends.

ok @Caboose:

1. out of interest, why is another name Orion? it's totally different than Caleb. just wondering!
2. so he's a bit underweight. why?
3. "but with his sister and friends he believes he can find family in his friends." just say his friends are his only family. people will understand
4. "because he never really had that in his own home life with his family" do you mean his family never protected him or he never protected his family and why?
5. "likes to believe he can save the world like the old heroes" now i don't know the background to your story, but what are the old heroes like, how did they save the world, and why does he want/need to?
6. so does protecting his sister motivate him? if so, just put that.
7. "Far too empathetic to the people close to him. " not sure how someone can be too empathetic.
8. "But when people betray him he takes it personally and finds that hard to forgive." don't we all?
9. "Caleb hates people who betray his trust" not really a prejudice per se. are there any groups of people he's generalized and hates because of one or two examples? that would be a prejudice.
10. talents and hobbies - some more please! especially with hobbies.
11. "a world that hates them" how does the world hate him? watch out for the cliche sad backstory, but obviously it's your choice.
12. add some more personality. all i know is that he's caring. is he overprotective? is he kind? smart? rude? disorganized? i barely know anything.
13. "He doesn't follow politics because no matter what side your on they always go too far." this seems like a prejudice!! maybe he dislikes politicians? what made him believe this?
14. "Because after the age of Heroes the world was broken a bit." how so?
15. where is his mother during the abuse? do child services exist? do his friends know? what's happened now?
16. "His father abuses him and his sister because their mother and his wife was killed by Neo-Human terrorists (that's his excuse at least)" background!!!1!
17. "crisis after crisis really took a toll on the world and instead of breaking it like say mad max it cracked it soo mini post apocalypse. " explain. blease
18. what is a "rage power"?
19. you emphasize the fact that he can only create shields, but later on say he can make blades and achieve super-human strengths.

so that's all! he's good, but develop him a bit more. :DD