(OPEN AGAIN!!!!) I'm in the mood to critique people's characters! Drop them off if you want :)

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Ah, yes, hi, i just discovered this friend babu. Can u roast him pls? q3q

WAAGH YOU'RE BACK!! I hope you had a wonderful week prior to this one and are looking forwards to better weeks to come !

AND AS PROMISED, I HAVE A BOY !

I’ve been trying to get a feel for him since he’s one of my more cool/cold(?) characters
But as of right now, it’s a little difficult for me
Boys are harder for me to develop than girls for SOME REASON
He just seems a little stale to me, so I desperately need your eyes for a fresh new look at him u_u

@Nie-Huaisang-God-of-Advice I'm glad to hear it! And thank you, Picrew will be my next dress up spree :)

@knikols :)

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@EWS-SunGod Why if course! ^^
Scott:

• I ADORE everything about her Looks, already gives such a good idea of her and also she's GORGEOUS
• Her Nature section is so good, I'm gonna have to nitpick haha. You say "she's undeniably kind. She doesn't' have the highest empathy level out there, but she's got great attention to detail" She's not a particularly empathetic person: so what is her motivation, or reasoning, for being kind? Does she try very hard to hide this inner kindness? Her attention to detail and organized nature would suggest that she's helpful and nice so as to keep the ball rolling, make sure there are no complications down the line: in this case, is there a selfishness to her actions, a self-preservation? I can totally see her as a Bianca Del Rio figure haha, who's a self-described "stone-cold-bitch" who in reality has no problem helping out the little ducklings, because she does not feel threatened or have anything to lose in doing so. Yet this doesn't quite seem to line up with everything else I've seen of Scott, so it feels like there's a tiny little thing missing that could really hold the whole thing together better.
• You say she's loyal; to who, or to what? You also mention she does not like children: yet, she takes up the "mentor" role fairly often, if the other sections are anything to go by. Adults can be just as unpredictable as children; I understand the "doesn't like crying" part but, what else is there to differentiate adults from children so much for her? Is it the developmental stage that scares her? Is she confident around adults because, in many ways, they know who they are and are not as easily swayed, while children are constantly looking to adults as an example of how to act, and she doesn't trust herself to do a good job at that? Even though she seems to be a great example? Are there some very small very hidden insecurities there somewhere????? Am I reading too far into this haha
• This is honestly such a strong section, she makes sense in almost every area and ugh, great stuff
• Great Social section as well

Overall, great characterization, can she be my wife too because she s My Type and I love her.
I'm curious how you'll develop her Conditions part, since clearly there's something in store there :) I really really like Scott, keep up the good work! I hope this proved helpful <3

@NotSoBeautifulDiseaster
Himawari:

• Good details in Looks! I would only add a bit more Body Type. also I didn't know we had Abs Cups :o
• Him being analytical and booksmart seems a bit at odds with him being impulsive: this could work, but you'll need to go into more detail, and refer to how these traits oppose each other but also how they fit together. Maybe tie in with his Strong Willed part, as that gives a good idea of what you're going for.
• In Weaknesses, in what ways is he Overbearing?
• "Gets flustered easily by perseverance" what does this mean haha
• He keeps Collin "in check", how does this work when he's also an Impulsive person, as you describe him?
• Wow very good history, obviously the run-on sentences are a bit difficult to read sometimes but very extensive details that I'm happy with :)
• AHAHAHAHA HIS LOVE INTEREST IS THAT GUY HE HATES THAT IS TOO FUNNY I just LOVE that, one of my favorite tropes :D
• I love that Voice Claim section, I think I've told you that before, helps a lot with visualization

hey Asumi looks good! A few things to specify here or there but, I hope this proved helpful with that! :)

@EWS-SunGod Why if course! ^^
Scott:

• I ADORE everything about her Looks, already gives such a good idea of her and also she's GORGEOUS
• Her Nature section is so good, I'm gonna have to nitpick haha. You say "she's undeniably kind. She doesn't' have the highest empathy level out there, but she's got great attention to detail" She's not a particularly empathetic person: so what is her motivation, or reasoning, for being kind? Does she try very hard to hide this inner kindness? Her attention to detail and organized nature would suggest that she's helpful and nice so as to keep the ball rolling, make sure there are no complications down the line: in this case, is there a selfishness to her actions, a self-preservation? I can totally see her as a Bianca Del Rio figure haha, who's a self-described "stone-cold-bitch" who in reality has no problem helping out the little ducklings, because she does not feel threatened or have anything to lose in doing so. Yet this doesn't quite seem to line up with everything else I've seen of Scott, so it feels like there's a tiny little thing missing that could really hold the whole thing together better.
• You say she's loyal; to who, or to what? You also mention she does not like children: yet, she takes up the "mentor" role fairly often, if the other sections are anything to go by. Adults can be just as unpredictable as children; I understand the "doesn't like crying" part but, what else is there to differentiate adults from children so much for her? Is it the developmental stage that scares her? Is she confident around adults because, in many ways, they know who they are and are not as easily swayed, while children are constantly looking to adults as an example of how to act, and she doesn't trust herself to do a good job at that? Even though she seems to be a great example? Are there some very small very hidden insecurities there somewhere????? Am I reading too far into this haha
• This is honestly such a strong section, she makes sense in almost every area and ugh, great stuff
• Great Social section as well

Overall, great characterization, can she be my wife too because she s My Type and I love her.
I'm curious how you'll develop her Conditions part, since clearly there's something in store there :) I really really like Scott, keep up the good work! I hope this proved helpful <3

Ahhhh thanks so much!!!! This was awesome and so helpful, I'm really glad you like her!! xDD I'll mabe post her again after I work on her some more if you're still open ^^ I'll definitely be using this to improve her :D So glad you thought she was well put together tho!!!! <3 <3

I would really appreciate it if you could take a look at Ayame for me!

(For the love of god can you please not quote the entire response when sending a new thing? it gets awfully confusing in here)

(For the love of god can you please not quote the entire response when sending a new thing? it gets awfully confusing in here)

Sorry for bothering you, I was trying to update the thread to see if it was still active _{sorry if I'm coming off as impatient}

it's ok man, im kinda sorry this thread aint as active as well, but also trust me it's pretty disappointing to see the new post is just a reposted wall of text qvq

Hey there! Dashan is needing some critique, feel free to check him out! Also, thanks!

would you mind doing eve? Eve Shasting

Do my character next, please?

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Here’s mine serena rose goodwin