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Dying! At the dinner table. BAND MEMBERS ONLY!

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haha yeah
I think it's good

person_off
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No like I'm serious, its annoying me.

person_off
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Hey would it be cool if you or girl who lived could sing some runs?

@IconicUsername

if you're talking to me, sure

person_off
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Actually I take it back, its great we just need to add in some more verses.

person_off
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if you're talking to me, sure

Ok thanks.

@IconicUsername

yw do i sing the first draft or

person_off
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You can sing the first part, the girl who lived can sing the second, ummmm I might rap the rap or sly can and then you both can duet for the last part.

person_off
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I push my chair away
Don't let my mind stray away
Anyway
I don't think anyone understands
I cannot bear those little green strands

(idk…)

person_off
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Hm okay

person_off
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I can rap like hell btw

person_off
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Ok then sly you do the rap because I rap like your grandmother.

person_off
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I push my chair away
Don't let my mind stray away
Anyway
I don't think anyone understands
I cannot bear those little green strands

(idk…)

Ok can we not make this like asparagus because well no.

person_off
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YAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYYY!!!!!!

person_off
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wait why not?

person_off
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Because I don't want to make the entire song about asparagus like there are other foods too.

person_off
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ALRIGHTY THEN

I search the cabinets once more
What was it that I was lookin for?

My eyes wander to the top
I suddenly stop
Is that an Ice pop?

person_off
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I don't think all three of those lines should rhyme.

person_off
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I was just trying to jazz it up a bit

person_off
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Well I think its ok.

person_off
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If you think its okay then okay

person_off
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I don't know, I'm not really the expert so might as well give some advice.

person_off
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lol no one here is an expert

person_off
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Well, I guess it just depends.

person_off
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How about and this is just an idea

we write the whole song before editing it or critiquing?

person_off
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I'm definitely not an expert, but I've been writing for years now. It may be a small thing but it sounds a little off to me. But that's only my opinion.

person_off
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Yeah that makes sense, I'm just not used to working like that. Sorry.

@IconicUsername

guys we should add some iconic chinese food in there

person_off
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Might as well do that.

@IconicUsername

yay