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@Starfast group

So like, I'm super weird about making forum threads for some reason, but I've been thinking that this one could be fun.

Your opening line is supposed to make your reader want to keep reading your story to find out more, and I'm curious as to what sentences you guys have come up with to do just that. Feel free to add context if you want.
Right now, I'm working on 2 main things: a sci-fi/ mystery thing, and a fantasy thing. My opening lines for them are:

I'm in party hell.

and

They were gone by the time I got back.

What are yours?

@FantaPop

The first one sounds super interesting! I'd definitely want to read more of it. The fics I'm currently working on start with:

He's made his peace.

and

Makito knows he shouldn't be here.

@TryToDoItWrite

I'm definitely hooked by y'all's openings! They sound interesting! This is the opening to my current WIP:
The Empire destroyed their lives before they had even begun.

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These all sound very interesting! @TryToDoItWrite yours sounds really dark. (Also, I'm sorry, but The Empire just makes me think of Star Wars XD)

Here are my opening lines:

It starts the way many things start, with a dark night and a large vat of bubbling, potentially radioactive fluid.

and

There was only one empty desk in the classroom.

and

Zinon is very strange.

and

Sydney has dark hair and bright eyes.

and….actually, you know what, I think I'll stop now XD I have waaaay too many stories I progress right now and I don't want to bore you with half a dozen opening lines.

@TryToDoItWrite

OooooOoOO I like the first one!
I know…all I think about is Star Wars too. If you have a better name for an invading tyrannical imperial government please please let me know
@Francis

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@TryToDoItWrite thanks!
If I come up with something else, I'll be sure to let you know :)

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@Blossom_Utonium

"We shouldn't be doing this."

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Concept one:
The Nicolet sisters were always the most honored guests at the royal banquet.

Concept two:
Leah Cobalt had exactly one talent, and it was seeming invisible.

Concept three:
Princess Amalia loved the view from the palace window.

Concept four:
My life has a striking resemble to a Shakespearean play, although I’m not sure if it’s a comedy or a tragedy.

Concept five:
“I’ll take the case,” I said, smiling. Not because of having the chance to do a good deed, but because I’m really low on cash, and I’d love to get a new motorcycle helmet.

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@Blossom_Utonium

I LOVE CONCEPT 4

@TryToDoItWrite

I like #4! @@jynador

@TryToDoItWrite

Jinx! @Blossom_Utonium

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Aw thanks!!! It’s one of my realistic fiction ones and it will tie into concept five.

@InTheRye

Mine are

"The branch tilted forward as Rowan carefully stepped on it while peering at the deer down below."

And

"Stop squirming, " my maid Liora fussed at me as she tugged and pulled at my hair while she braided it into an intricate style.

And

"I'm cold, I'm tired, and I'm going to kill someone if you don't find me some coffee."

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@InTheRye I love the last one XD

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@RompingSphinx group

I have:

"Be safe!" cried his mother. "Don't destroy the world!"

But my favorite that I've written is from an old story draft that was eventually tossed out:

Enchiladas are dangerous things.

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@RompingSphinx the second one is great

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@RompingSphinx group

@Francis of the Fork Cult Thanks :D

@InTheRye

@InTheRye I love the last one XD

Thanks!

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@LittleBear group

Ooh fun!

Life is a matter of outlooks

I would kill for my sister, though at the moment I would much rather kill her.

Also, @TryToDoItWrite try: Colonizers, Conquerors, Overlords, Fascists or if you even just used a capital "T" Them or They for the He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named effect. (But SW rocks so not a bad thing in my book! )

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"Do anything you want to me, just… don't kill my cat, okay?"

@TryToDoItWrite

Nice! thank you so much!! @LittleBear

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"What the heck is this?" Jackson asked, holding up his new bumper sticker.
"It's the Millenium Falcon, because your car is a piece of junk," I answer, "Now put it on the window so we can go!"

@yeetus

*He had been in the wood for hours now, looking for his brother beside the snow-covered paths. It is normally bad enough in winter, with the snow and the bone-chilling wind, but Lórinar simply couldn’t believe Daerion, who could multiply four-digit numbers in his head, would be stupid enough to ignore the warnings of huge vampire bats in the area. *
(First two sentences, sorry)

@mckapo

Pulling ever so slightly so as not to tear the entire wing from the small fairy’s back, Pan ground his teeth against the shriek of pain that rattled his eardrums. Pushing past the sudden appearance of his small amount of empathy, Pan pulled again, half of the thin effervescent wing now hanging limply off the fairy. The skin on her back started to swell and small red droplets oozed out of the wound, but Pan was more focused on the fairy’s small face, and the black tar-like tear that squeezed itself out of the corner of her bright blue eye.

eh… opening paragraph?

Shelby

Mine's just a simple "V never like fire."
Like, that's the whole first paragraph. And I want the second book to start in a similar way, something like "V had never liked fire, but now she nearly hated it." or something like that, I think it'd be a nice parallel.
(And it's like 'haha, irony' cause she ends up being able to control fire and part of her whole character arc is her having to deal with that and getting over her fear, while still realistically-ish having trouble effectively using it with that fear.)

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It was a crackle of energy and the sudden rip of space and time that caught their attention.

A white, glittery, high heeled boot emerged from the darker than black worm hole.

Bruised feet hit the wet ground, and a muddy dress flapped wildly behind a bleeding figure

Small, deeply colored charms hanging off of his belt loops smacked together lightly as he struggled.

Glossy cap-toed shoes strode confidently across the forest floor, the usual clacking created by the heel snuffed out by the dirt

Dark, intelligent eyes peered up at him.

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@Riorlyne pets

Feyli's mother had told her many times not to touch anything the ocean brought them after a storm.

"One would think stories about princesses and knights are all children's stories about evil witches and dragons being put in a dumb job like sewer cleaning when the heroic knight saves the beautiful princess. Have you ever wished the princess would go for the terrifying dragon instead of the handsome knight? Unless you're a little kid (why are you reading this, then, it's too dark for you), you probably wish that princesses would stop being stereotyped to always go for the hot and rich men. Well, at least the villains were wonderfully awful, unlike now. (Looking at you, Zootopia) Admit it, we all at some point wanted our heroes to act rude and villains act nice. Why do people hate rude heroes, exactly? Oh, it's because we're all used to pure angels falling in love with… pure angels. Well, guess what? This story ISN'T about all those cliches! This story is about many things, but no one is completely pure of heart or completely heartless. The heroes of this story are flawed. The villains of this story have kind traits. And death is an actual thing that happens. Oh, oh, yeah, the story should start."

@AllyM

“In a land far from civilization, occupied by two clashing forces, live the ones all but forgotten.” I mean technically it’s from the prologue but I guess it counts.

@Joneathan

Some of mine are
-Each year there's around 12,000 deaths involving staircases. At least the way I died was less embarrassing.
-Do you know how hard it is too have food allergies in the middle of the apocalypse?
-By now even I have to admit, my house is haunted.
-Dolls aren't that creepy you big baby.