Rachel

Prologue It was dark. The tall graceful elf slinked among the trees of the forest swallowed up by the inky black of a shadowy night. The majestic silver moon was stunning tonight as it was every ...

I love it!

i loved it! so the "perfect" human is kind of like a Vulcan? i would love to read and edit for you as the story progresses if you want,

i started editing but ill do the rest later. hope you find it helpful!

> 😁 No problem sorry I hate correcting people cause I feel like a jerk but I just really can't handle mid evil ackk sorry ok i figured out how to fix it XD

> 😁 No problem sorry I hate correcting people cause I feel like a jerk but I just really can't handle mid evil ackk sorry dont feel bad! i dont want to go around my whole life thinking somet...

> I'M SORRY I'M SORRY I'M SO SORRY I LOVE YOUR STORYLINE BUT IT'S MEDIEVAL NOT MID EVIL SORRY SORRY SORRY I LOVE YOUR CHARACTERS AND PLOT! no your fine :P its kinda late where i am and i neve...

so in the beginning you say that both weapons are drawn but then they draw their weapons later...? also when someone says grim i think of a facial expiration so maybe don't use that here? it could ...

> I LOVE IT > I unfortunately won't be on again for a while (Broke my computer) But once I am, I will get back to you with more details. hey i made a new discussion with the most recent u...

Prologue It was dark. The tall graceful elf slinked among the trees of the forest swallowed up by the inky black of a shadowy night. The majestic silver moon was stunning tonight as it was every ...