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I really love this!! I think you have a great way of building mystery and suspense by giving the reader strategic amounts of information in the dialogue and in Ben's internal thoughts. The dialogue...

I think whether people like flashbacks usually, like anything, depends on how and why it's done. They can be a great device for selectively adding information, for recontextualising a story or dras...

I don't think this is inherently convoluted - or, rather, I think that doesn't have to be a problem depending on the execution (probably not the most helpful critique of a premise haha). I think ea...

maybe another approach could be to dig into how and why might develop a certain way. From what I can tell, historically it often had to do with aggregating authority - this person has command over ...

asdlkfjds a noble rank, to be sure

oh hey I think I'm technically an elder! I joined in January 2018

@izzyandviolins ooooooh I love that snippet!!! very descriptive and vivid, and you create a super interesting tone that's very bleak and yet ends on that ironically comforting note of "safe haven",...

ooooh this is amazing!!! it's very emotive and raw but it also expresses itself very clearly - something about the all lower caps and the repetition and the structure of the "eyes of men" and then...

aaah I'm glad you like it!! I don't mind at all!

oooh I thought I'd take a stab at this! she seems like a fun character 😊