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Want me to critique anyone? I'm game

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@@Rubyjane

@TheMusicalVampire
So much better!! Good job!!

@CinnamonRoll

Hi!! I've been posting these bbs all over but I think everyone is shying away from the multitude of links. I realize it's a lot so you don't have to go super in depth or do everyone if you don't want to!! Thanks in advance!! :DDD

Seraphine: Seraphine Des-Marais
Michelle: Michelle Gerard-St. Clair
Alfonse: Alfonse Gerard
Estelle: Estelle Gerard-St. Clair
Elias: Elias Gerard-St. Clair

@@Rubyjane

@CinnamonRoll
Sure, I can do them very soon. Oh btw I'm Markus' creator and about meeting Everleigh, I haven't developed her enough to where I'm really comfortable sharing her.

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Mind if you critique mine

Zoe: Zoe Melana

@@Rubyjane

@CinnamonRoll
Seraphine:
No middle name?
Why is her smile fake?
What does she do when she's angry? Or scared?
Water magic, how interesting.
Michelle:
Are her nails always painted white?
What does she do when angry? Sad? Excitedly?
She seems really sweet and maybe a bit perfect. Does she have any other flaws?
Alfonse:
No middle name?
(He sounds cute)
Why was he poisoned?
Estelle:
What does she do when she's excited? Happy?
Why doesn't she use magic all the time?
Elias:
What does he do when he's happy? Sad?
How does he help the resistance?
Sorry this isn't much, but I hope it helped a bit!!

@@Reiko

Could you critique mine? I mean I'll be honest it's a joke of a character but I was wondering if there was anything you thought I should add. Thank you so much!
Cownt- Cownt

@@Rubyjane

@@Reiko
Oh my. This is so funny.
Does she have a full name?
She's immortal, is she a special cow?
Any particular shade of red?
Can you add more to the backstory?
I'm not sure there is anything else, I hope I helped. Very interesting Cow. Wow I didn't think I would ever say that:)

Kai

@Rubyjane
Thank you! I was stuck on where to go with her now I have a few new ideas.

Kat

Hi! Can you please critique my character?

@@Rubyjane

@Nerd_Girl2.0
Oh my goodness, let me apologize!! I didn't see your request, I am so sorry!! I'll do it now!!
No middle name?
Any particular reason why you capitalized the fact that she can't drive?
Maybe try elaborating on each one of her flaw/motivations?
Wat sort of prophesy about her?

Zen

Good morning! If you aren't too busy with others in this thread, could I ask you review over my ghostie character? I never know what details to write down, and I thought I'd get a second opinion from a few folks. Thank you in advance lol!

@swiftbird82

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@3abbie3 Premium Supporter

If you wouldn't mind doing another character of mine: Alexei Vladovich Petrov

Libraleap

Hello, would you mind critiquing my two main characters? I would just like some honest feedback, so be as harsh as you want!

Sky I've been working on a set of main characters for my novel for a long time now. I know them a lot better in my head than anything I can write down at this point. I'm interested to see what kind of impression they leave on other people. Let me know if you have any questions.