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Hi, guys!!! Sorry for going dark for so long. I've been getting REAL busy, and I've decided to close this thread early. Everyone who's dropped links still gets a spot. I've made time to critique to...

oh BOY do I have a negative arc Before everything, she was a little withdrawn. She felt out of place in the world around her, and depended almost entirely on her sister, shaping her personality ...

Hi, guys!! All quiet on the thread tonight! @Katastrophe - I'm happy to hear you're still enjoying!! Opening up about weaknesses would be SUCH an amazing character moment, and the connection co...

All right, @Katastrophe, back again!! Top down on Raiz... The biggest issue I have with Raiz's personality is that he feels a little one-dimensional. While it's okay to have genuinely mean or a...

Hi, folks!! Short enough round-up for the evening: Tonight I'll be critiquing @Katastrophe !!

@Katastrophe - hey, quick response!!! So glad it was helpful!! And I agree - adding that motivating event will add amazing nuance to Damian's character! I'll see you again tomorrow for Raiz! :D

All right, @Oakley-is-Oaken-Bull, here we go!! Top down on Valen... sorry what do you mean eventual antagonist what uhh my good sir - (not even ready to offer critiques, just popping in to ...

Starting off with @Katastrophe! Top down on Damian... (So I can't quite recall what I've said on previous critiques - sorry if any of this feels redundant!) The overwhelming sense I get with...

Hello, everyone!! Slightly early tonight and ready to round up!! Tonight's critiques are for @Katastrophe and @Oakley-is-Oaken-Bull! Tomorrow, I'll be critiquing @Katastrophe! @Oakley-is-O...

@Pop-Liquid - Wow, fast reply!! I'm really glad you liked it, and I'm happy I could give you things to think about! Creative writing classes are awesome - I hope you have a good experience!! @/...