Offering Character Critique

I'm offering constructive critique for your characters. :)

Okey dokey:

1. Her personality is not developed at all. Caring what other people think could be a part of it, but it defiantly does not encompass her whole character
2. Nice hobbies (lol) but I don’t think that ‘drinking chocolate milk with a spoon’ counts. Maybe put that under Talents?
3. She is overweight for 5’1”. Not that I have anything against that, but just something you may want to consider.
4. Backstory would be appreciated

Besides that, I like her! Happy writing!

I actually based her off of myself 😂 Welp,I guess I don't know my own personality.Have a great day!

XD You probably do, and that’s why its just not enough. You know yourself so well that when the time comes to write it on paper, you write a few basics to trigger your knowledge of the subject. Trust me, I’ve done it so often. You too!

Thanks! :)

Could you do mine? I would critique yours, but I'm not so great at it…

Sure!

It's nice! I should point out one thing. An image. I find it SO,SO,SO much easier to recognize and envision a character when there's an image. Even if it's just a quick doodle,it's very helpful to get the jist of what a character looks like when you have some visual idea. It would also be helful if you filled out the "Random facts" category. But,overall,he sounds like a good-natured guy that I could get along with. Hope this helps! :)

Thank you! I will keep both of those in mind and work on them.

I would be more specific in the politics and give some reason why for her view points and options. Like give her a reason why. Why doesn't she like LGBT people. Other than that everything was was.

This is my bean Lucas.

@TheMusicalVampire Overall it's great but what school does he go to be more specific in the background.

With your character @Annika:

• I noticed that she was more than slightly overweight comparing her weitght, age, and height.
• Maybe adding some more prejudices could add on to her personality.
• Also, I feel she is rather young to have an opinion on LGBT people unless she has a backstory on it. Adding that can clear it up.
• This is kinda more opinion based but, maybe putting eating instead of drinking becuase she does it with a spoon. I don't really know though.
• Putting more on the politics.
• Adding a history can help a TON when creating a character. It will also give her more personality and make her seem less "robot" like.

This is a very well thought out character and after tweaking, she will be amazing.
In my opinion, she seemed like a very generic middle school girl with no personality. So, adding on more of a backstory and some other stuff will help.
I was also wondering if you did the art?? If so, it is AMAZING.

@TheMusicalVampire Haha! No I didn't draw her. I wish! I got her off online.

This is my bean Lucas.

I LOVE how much effort you put in him! Good job! As I have previously said,I find it helpful to have an image along with the character. Even if it's a 15-minute sketch on MS Paint or a 20 hour long in-depth ultra realistic drawing on Photoshop or something,make a drawing. :)

@Annika
Thank you for the critique!
I will be adding his updated history later and having you along with some others look at it.

Would you mind critiquing this character? He's the villain (I want him to slightly match Aaron Burr from Hamilton in terms of personality) in my story, but I want to make sure he's not one-dimensional.
https://www.notebook.ai/plan/characters/390286#!

Hi! Would you mind looking over these characters?

Andrea: Andrea Davis
Ethan: Ethan Grant
Luke: Luke Steele

critque please

@Annika
It is me again!
I have returned with Lucas and their updated history.

Thank you!

Hey, could you critique my character Rie? Here's the link; Rie Katayama

ok , this character needs work, so… Celia Bishop

hey do you think you could take some time to look at this character for me please?