Character Analysis- sup, give my your character and I'll critique it: I'll analyze every single one! (closed- go away)

I realize you have quite a line haha, but hope it's okay if I drop off another character: Mortimer Wilkerson Hasn't been critiqued yet, so might be a lil wonky.

This is my anthropomorphic, science fiction character(I swear I'm not a furry)

So sorry I've been gone s long, I just moved all the way across my country from Wisconsin to Florida while doing a ton of other things. My plate was completely full without any room for this type of stuff. I'll be completely back soon.

Can you do Autumn?

Daniel Divine please Daniel Divine

When you can, could you do Trinity?

And Irene?

A couple of side notes, Trinity and Irene are not part of the same universe they do not exist together at all. I'm still working on both of them, but I would like to know what I can improve about them thus far.
Thank you in advance!

Hello! Could you be really mean when critiquing my girl Syrune? I'd really appreciate it :)

I have kinda skimmed over his backstory and such, mostly because he is such a new character and still in development. It would mean a lot to me if you could critique him because I really want him to have an impactful presence in my story.
Thank you so much xX

Sup, sorry I'm like 3 months late to this… So I have Luke here (kind of?)…

• This doesn't seem very realistic with the mutation stuff… You're really going to want to research a lot more into that.
• More flaws to his character to flesh him out.
• You keep on saying he's dead; then you go on about his mutated self like he's alive again just not really himself.
• you need themes of the story built into this character to either foil (refect) it or be someone who has a bit of the theme built into them.

yeppers,

• Jana

So I've had this character for a long time, and I have been trying to flesh him out. I have a long backstory that probably makes no sense, but I would be appreciative of any feedback you can come up with so I can further develop my story. I'm very thankful for people like you who take the time to help others. Thank you :)

(Just as a side note, the story is intended to have comical elements, and that element bled through in the outline)

Hey, sorry this is so late. Here are my critiques on Leomihr, and by the way, you are so sweet! Thank you!

• I would put in more tendencies/mannerisms even if they aren't destructive because the little things we do say a lot about ourselves. (Maybe more caring tendencies- ei: observing others making sure they're okay, helping others by habit, or just softer stuff to show that people have many dimensions to them?
• I like his progression as a character, but I would like to see it go more in-depth? Like what makes him discover his not so selfish path? What (or who) affects his change in perspective?
• more flaws I guess, to feel more fleshed out as a person.
• I really want to see him grow for him to overcome the toxic repetition of thoughts that he has put into his head of blaming himself about things he couldn't control for real character development and for that to tie into a theme of the story. Maybe tie more flaws or past grievances into that?

Other than that looks absolutely marvelous!

• Jana

( ͡ᵔ ͜ʖ ͡ᵔ ) hello

Hi?
So it's Bianca…

• kinda a cheesy last name… but it's fine if you like it, just so you know- it does read off as tweenish.
• 106 is really, REALLY skinny… I mean even for an anorexic adult and her height… Could I suggest putting at least 10 lbs on her?
• She would be a VERY dysfunction person in real life, and it's not good romanizing these heavy topics you're bringing up. I'm not saying you are, just handle these things with delicate care because no one needs another 13 reasons why on mishandling these things.
• Really not that much filled out- I would get on that.
• I feel like I bearly know her by reading all of that- try and add demotions and flesh her out other than putting "She's kind" because that really doesn't say much.

yep,
Jana

Hello, would u mind taking a look at my character, she's actually well developed character(only in my head, though) but i cant seem to describe it with words, due to my horrible english. But i did some work on her backstory, so i hope u can analyze it.

And for a side note, her story and her overall character is based on two canon games of final fantasy. So i hope u could consider it if anything doesnt make sense. Thank u so much in advance

Sure,

• my real thing here is what makes her her? She seems to be just a thing with a bunch of lists conveying her basic character- straight forward with nothing special or a real person about her character. She doesn't seem like a real person, just a collection of ness. Idk if that makes sense to you.
• How does she play into and off the story, other characters, and themes?

That's about it :)
Jana

Oh, hi! This is the first discussion I'm actually participating lol
Would you mind giving my character a look? He's at a really early stage, so it would be nice to have some feedback to develop him well x]

Thanks!

Heh, sorry this so late… Sorry that this was your first one was with the inactive me…
And I can't view it because it is not public…

I realize you have quite a line haha, but hope it's okay if I drop off another character: Mortimer Wilkerson Hasn't been critiqued yet, so might be a lil wonky.

I feel like I've done a couple of yours? Maybe I'm wrong… Well anyways…

• lol that name
• wtf is "China blue?" like the porcelain china that's painted in that dark blue?
• more motivations– every character needs a goal for the story to progress
• seems very sweet and just a nice guy altogether.
• how does his past abuse translate into how he is now- basically how is it still affecting?

Other than that, you really seem to know what you're doing :0
Jana

This is my anthropomorphic, science fiction character(I swear I'm not a furry)

Sorry I can't access it because it's on private :(

Can you do Autumn?

Hey,
So Autumn…

• servilely underweight… add at least 15 more pounds to her! Jeez…
• the death of a loved one that was so close to us completely changes us. How has this affected her and how she perceives the world, and how does it affect even just her mundane actions?
• Needs more to her personality than just being a good person and caring and blah, blah, blah. Shes reads off as just like all the other female basic protagonists and I, to be honest, hate it. How is this story different and this character different to give us more insight into the world?
• Needs dimension and a purpose in general.

Good Luck :)
Jana

I realize you have quite a line haha, but hope it's okay if I drop off another character: Mortimer Wilkerson Hasn't been critiqued yet, so might be a lil wonky.

I feel like I've done a couple of yours? Maybe I'm wrong… Well anyways…

• lol that name
• wtf is "China blue?" like the porcelain china that's painted in that dark blue?
• more motivations– every character needs a goal for the story to progress
• seems very sweet and just a nice guy altogether.
• how does his past abuse translate into how he is now- basically how is it still affecting?

Other than that, you really seem to know what you're doing :0
Jana

Hey wow I actually forgot about this thread! Thank you for getting back to me, I appreciate it :) Good things to look at, will do! (Also I'll see you in my own thread sometime soon ^^)

So I've had this character for a long time, and I have been trying to flesh him out. I have a long backstory that probably makes no sense, but I would be appreciative of any feedback you can come up with so I can further develop my story. I'm very thankful for people like you who take the time to help others. Thank you :)

(Just as a side note, the story is intended to have comical elements, and that element bled through in the outline)

Hey, sorry this is so late. Here are my critiques on Leomihr, and by the way, you are so sweet! Thank you!

• I would put in more tendencies/mannerisms even if they aren't destructive because the little things we do say a lot about ourselves. (Maybe more caring tendencies- ei: observing others making sure they're okay, helping others by habit, or just softer stuff to show that people have many dimensions to them?
• I like his progression as a character, but I would like to see it go more in-depth? Like what makes him discover his not so selfish path? What (or who) affects his change in perspective?
• more flaws I guess, to feel more fleshed out as a person.
• I really want to see him grow for him to overcome the toxic repetition of thoughts that he has put into his head of blaming himself about things he couldn't control for real character development and for that to tie into a theme of the story. Maybe tie more flaws or past grievances into that?

Other than that looks absolutely marvelous!

• Jana

Thank you so much! I really appreciate your input, it helps a lot. Also don't worry about it being late. Everyone gets busy, and you are no exception. Besides, it was a pleasant little surprise :)

thankyou!

Could you do lyric

(Probably)

Could you critique Lily? Invalid Character

(I think that Jana might have forgotten about this.)

No I'm just really busy with school. I'll get on it as soon as I can

(Probably)

Dude… I have a life outside of this

(i know you do, take your time, no one's rushing you)

Could you critique mine? His name is Michael. Be as harsh as you possibly can.