(OPEN AGAIN!!!!) I'm in the mood to critique people's characters! Drop them off if you want :)

August is such a good character, I immediately took a liking to him haha, and you did great with detailing him: all my questions are just extra somethings, he's very good already as is. Hope this was at least a bit helpful for you :)

Thank you so much for the critique! Definitely going to be adding some more detail based on your questions. I'm glad you like August!

@Kinarymo
Narion: (I'm going to use he/him pronouns for consistency if that's alright)

• Love his design as a Morphidae, esp the detail of golden tears for the missing eyes. Great description of his appearance in general (as always).
• Jesus christ this poor child. :( Great mannerisms, they go well with his personality. Does Narion ever get angry? more specifically, indignant? Is he aware/mature enough to realize when he is being used, or taken advantage of, or treated unfairly?
• In Flaws, how does he react to strangers approaching him? Does his coldness surface and make him try to end the conversation quickly, or does he give people the chance to prove themselves?
• "He's not interested about politics mostly because he does not care or he doesn't want to get involved." Not sure if I've said this to you, but having no opinion on politics once you're aware of it's existence isn't,,,, really possible. If you mean that because he's very young, he doesn't know much about politics and so isn't aware of the effect it might have on his life, write that; if he is aware of politics and yet can still afford to "stay out of it", it probably means he's not very affected (not negatively) by whatever laws may be in place, which would place him o the right, or conservative, because why want to change a system that benefits you?
• Ahh the backstory is familiar, I can piece it all together with the profiles of Narion's parents, which I've already critiqued for you :) Good job on cohesiveness.
• "Narion considered himself to be a burden for his adoptive family, even though they kept telling him otherwise." Something that could be elaborated on in Nature, speaking of his self-esteem and the feeling of being a burden on people who are just,,, doing their job, or the bare minimum, for him.

Overall another very detailed and good character! It's hard to say much because Narion is still a child and there's SO MUCH that could change as he grows older and the story progresses, but he's a good point right now. Keep it up, and I hope I was helpful!

August is such a good character, I immediately took a liking to him haha, and you did great with detailing him: all my questions are just extra somethings, he's very good already as is. Hope this was at least a bit helpful for you :)

Thank you so much for the critique! Definitely going to be adding some more detail based on your questions. I'm glad you like August!

:) :) :)

@Wheeze_For_Me
Killian:

• Interesting nickname, how did she come by it? It's not similar enough to Killian to just be a simple shortening.
• I am white and by no means an authority, but her skin tone is "very pale" despite her being Maori; is she mixed, or does she have white people in her ancestry?
• People have different definitions for "fit", try to add more detail here! Is she toned, thick, muscled, lean, etc? Does she have wide hips, or narrow shoulders, or voluptuous curves, or flat angles? Does she have abs???
• You say in Conditions she has vitiligo: this could be elaborated in Skin Tone as well, just for the sake of consistency. And you can go MUCH more in-depth with her Personality, and you can add to it by actually filling out the other sections in the Nature form (Mannerisms (!!), Motivations, Flaws…). She has No Flaws, not a great sign. You mention she's easily bored, and this could be spun to be a flaw (too high standards? ungrateful? cynical?). What makes your character unsympathetic, and what's the side she would show first and foremost to someone she dislikes? And how does she appear to someone who doesn't like her? Emphasize what makes her flirtatious: is it because she is always open to dating? Does she use it as a way to gain the upper hand in social situations? Does she flirt to distract from her other traits, does she flirt because she hopes to make someone uncomfortable and thinks it's funny? Is it to relieve her boredom, the thrill of trying to win someone's exclusive attention and affection? Sarcastic is good, but just these three traits give me the bare minimum for Killian's personality and should be elaborated.
• The backstory is fine, but if Runt killed her family did she infiltrate under a fake name, with a new identity? Was her family the random victim of their violence, in which case they wouldn't remember her? There are some details missing here. This also sheds light on some new elements of Killian's personality: vengeful, brave (reckless? risk-taking?), loyal (stuck in the past?), and these could also fill out either her flaws or general personality nicely.

You've filled out what seems to be the bare minimum for Killian's profile: it's a start. She has a good foundation, and if you keep adding small details bit-by-bit you could build a unique and even relatable character. Good luck!

Thank u @Kaloobia, you were amazingly helpful as always o3o <3
i was still in the middle of editing his profile until 2 mins ago, so certain stuff might have been changed from what u originally saw, but alas, your feedback was very helpful o3o

_{And yes, i'm probably abusing this poor child more than i should}

@NotSoBeautifulDiseaster
Sophie:

• Intriguing detail with the symbols, that's a creative addition!
• Go more in detail with her body type: "petite" could simply mean "small and compact", but is she thin? underweight even? does she have chub that's simply evenly distributed, making for a solid form? Not to mention you didn't put down a Weight for her.
• I do like how you structured her Nature section, but putting her minuses in Flaws would be more simple, and could hash it out more fully: not to mention all of these qualities could be elaborated, and/or explained more in-depth. What exactly is she insecure about? Is she optimistic in a natural way or in a way that's trained? Especially with you mentioning her past with bullying. Along those lines, your description and her backstory suggest a need to fit in, to be accepted, even at the cost of personal values, and at the cost of loved ones: this could be noted and elaborated as well in the flaws section. In general Sophie is well-off in the Flaws department, which makes for an interesting and multi-layered person that could do very well if written correctly. Other questions: she's kind and friendly, but with who? When does her kindness and friendliness run out? Where was this kindness and friendliness when she got swept up by peer pressure and her own selfishness about being accepted, and resorted to bullying? How far does her stubbornness go? Will she argue to the death (figuratively)? Will she never admit that she was wrong? Is there an element of pride to her stubbornness? If so, you could add sympathy to her character by elaborating how, for someone who fights for her side of the story with a passion, it says something about her conviction and her reform that she was able to bounce back from her mistakes, and admit that she was wrong, and at fault for them. Up to you, and I could be pulling at blank straws here haha.
• What do you mean when you say she's "unlucky" in Quirks? If you are trying to blame her past bad behavior on her Luck, that's a dangerous trap to fall into and I would readily say that a character who accepts that she was wrong by her own fault is much more interesting than someone who's a "victim of her destiny/environment". If you mean something else, I don't really understand what it is haha, and what qualifies it as a "quirk". And her "lying about shallow things" could easily be added to Flaws: along those lines, how far is "too far" for Sophie when it comes to lying? White lies are "harmless", sure, but when they add up it creates a whirlpool of untruth that can negatively affect the liar as well as those around them. Also, is she very good at lying to herself?
• Interesting that she dislikes "fake people", yet she herself "lies about shallow things" –> another flaw you could elaborate on, hypocrisy, double standards that she herself may be unaware of having. Also with her disliking "cruelty" (which you put twice btw, not sure if that was on purpose), another contradiction with her past actions.
• Why does she dislike passive people? Is it because they remind her of herself, how she was swept up into bad behavior due to a need to belong? Does she blindly take out her resentment for her former self on those that remind her of it? Another flaw to explore, not to mention something that could help in explaining the inner working of her mind that led her to bullying in he first place, even before she changed. In general she seems to dislike a lot of qualities that she herself probably exhibited in her bullying days: maybe elaborate on her deep-rooted dislike of herself? Hating herself presently, due to her past actions, makes a lot of sense, and would even garner her sympathy points in the eyes of the reader. Along those lines, where are her feelings of remorse, of guilt, that should be stated I think, other than "she's trying to be a better person"? A sociopath "tries to be a better person", but not because of feelings of guilt, rather for the sake of better manipulating people and gaining trust. Might be stating the obvious, but I still think it's worth mentioning.
• Why wasn't she appreciative of her brother, during a time that I assume was before her bullying phase? Is her mean streak something that comes more naturally than any of us would care to admit?
• Why was she jealous of her brother?
• (You'll have to excuse me for saying, you use a lot of run-ons and some verbs aren't in the right place so I had a bit of trouble understanding this middle paragraph of her backstory). May I suggest going more in-depth about the psychology and indecision of Sophie's mind when it came to choosing between her "friends" and her brother? Not necessary, just a nitpick probably haha.
• You say in Overview that her main theme is Bravery. If she were naturally brave, she would have stood up to her "friends" despite her fear of being excluded, so that begs the question, is her journey about learning to be brave?

I will close off with this: it's common to find characters that are beloved by the audience because, although they have a shady past, they are presently just so lovable and so reformed, so irresistible, that they are easily forgiven for any past mistakes and cruelty. I appreciate that you aren't trying to do that with Sophie: she has the potential for a lot of flaws that showcase her growth, her being smack-dab in the middle of growth, while still facing the consequences for her actions, and to me that's key. If she were to get off scott-free for her mistakes, then she would come off as a "passive ungrateful brat", as you introduce her ;) But I honestly didn't get too much of that vibe from her, especially knowing what happened to her and that she's clearly trying to change. Though, I would suggest putting in that bit about her trying to make amends with her brother to this day, which I don't believe you actually mention in her profile? Anyway. Her entire story, from the very beginning, is a Redemption arc, and I'm very intrigued by that. If you manage to write it correctly, Sophie could experience some very compelling character growth that drags the reader over to her side. Good luck, and I hope this was helpful!

Thank u @Kaloobia, you were amazingly helpful as always o3o <3
i was still in the middle of editing his profile until 2 mins ago, so certain stuff might have been changed from what u originally saw, but alas, your feedback was very helpful o3o

_{And yes, i'm probably abusing this poor child more than i should}

You're totally welcome, as always :)

@Morosis
Don't be fooled by the long blocks of texts, I really do over-explain myself haha :) And I'm not swarmed at all yet, don't even worry about it!
Luke:

• oh?? he's dead??? oh no
• oh nevermind he's just,,,,, not all there presently, poor guy
• I like that you're not afraid to make him scary-looking, and not in the "beastly but handsome, uwu" way.
• I,,, am not an authority and have made inconsistencies with weight myself, but I think 225lbs is a tad overweight for his body type, as you describe him. Low priority, but i would double-check
• Good Looks section all in all, nice details.
• This is a very sad, sad character ;_; From what I understand, he's a walking nuclear missile: is he aware of this? Is knowing that he would have to kill himself to explode properly, the only thing holding him back? Does he still have a want for survival left, and is this indicative of perhaps him still having a shred of humanity, in the pure sense of having a self-preservative sentiment?
• Along these lines, is the entire reason he's a patient at the Facility because there's still a chance of "saving" him?? Or is it a lost hope? Are they simply detaining him until they can find a way, to put it mildly, euthanize him without activating his nuclear power? Is it possible to kill him without him going off like the bomb he is?
• Great Nature section, especially for a character that's a borderline mindless zombie: you still manage to create a uniqueness and a sense of sympathy, if not pity, for Luke.
• Ooh, what sort of trophies did he get? For what?
• oooooh wow, I've never seen an enemy list OR a friend list that long. Simple curiosity on my end, how does he maintain friends in his current state??? Or are these friends from "before"?
• His backstory is heartbreaking, thanks.

Overall a (surprisingly!) well-developed character, and clearly very well-thought-out. Good job, and I hope I was at least mildly helpful!

@Morosis
Don't feel weird at all, I'm very happy that you answered some of my questions! There's no obligation of course haha, but I do appreciate the clarifications :)
Thanks for the reply, and drop by again anytime! ^^

It would be swell if you took a look at mine aswell Elvira Wright Eddington It's for a HP fanfic hope that doesn't matter

Hii, its me again! Mind taking a look at this villain of mine? pls roast it to the bone, idk how to make villains, this one took 7 yrs to make :'D

I know i've been sending them really often, but you can always put me at the end of the wait list, i dont mind o3o

@nicolovingx
I have quite a few Hogwarts OCs myself, don't worry about it ;) Any original character is game.
Elvira:

• A tiny detail, but what sort of bangs? Side-swept? The kind that curtain your face? Blunt bangs?
• I think plump lips would do well in Identifying Marks. Other than that, very good Looks section, I like the details in Body Type.
• A very interesting and complex combination of traits!! Her Motivations are a little unclear, simply because you don't use full sentences and I'm not sure if the nouns you use are things that motivate her or things that affect her or what. A good list but needs clarification. Very good Mannerisms and Flaws, though I think you could go more in-depth on the former: any particular manner of speaking? A certain gait? Some other nervous habits perhaps, other than twisting her wedding ring? Just some ideas.
• She can be impatient: when, and under what circumstances? Is it people, or situations, that make her patience wear thin? Is she normally a patient person, or, if you want a more pejorative implication, opportunistic enough to keep herself in check most of the time?
• What do you mean by "discreet" in Talents? She knows how to hide, how to sneak around? Is she a very good liar? What exactly are her morals, her standards for herself and others (and is she a hypocrite in the sense where she holds others to a different standard than herself? you mention she's classicist)? How far is too far for her, where's the metaphorical "line" that should not be crossed when it comes to lying, and to getting what she wants?
• Is her Prejudice strong enough that she would throw around a slur? Again in relation to her morals, but also in relation to how she expresses and presents herself: is she very obvious about her biases, about her values? If she is a good salesperson she knows how to put on a charismatic face, is this attitude reserved solely for customers or does she fake it with people "close" to her, as well?
• She's bad at potions but potioneering is a hobby: what makes her want to persevere in something she is bad at and (from what I understand) isn't exactly necessary for her job?
• "‘Reading stories seems waste of time, I’d rather go out in the world and discover everything myself.’" This could go in Prejudices as well!
• Okay, so potioneering IS part of her job: how can she afford to be bad at it?
• Everything else in Social seems good!
• ooooooh her love interest is also her enemy how dramatic :D
• I really like her Gallery pictures, may I ask who's her faceclaim? (if you don't know that's fine too haha)
• Wow interesting backstory. You never mention a House for her, or are those different at Ilvermorny?

Overall an interesting character, especially as a lead! She could use some refinement in certain areas and some small details to add coherence, but you did good with her! I hope this was helpful :)

@nicolovingx
I have quite a few Hogwarts OCs myself, don't worry about it ;) Any original character is game.
Elvira:

• A tiny detail, but what sort of bangs? Side-swept? The kind that curtain your face? Blunt bangs?
• I think plump lips would do well in Identifying Marks. Other than that, very good Looks section, I like the details in Body Type.
• A very interesting and complex combination of traits!! Her Motivations are a little unclear, simply because you don't use full sentences and I'm not sure if the nouns you use are things that motivate her or things that affect her or what. A good list but needs clarification. Very good Mannerisms and Flaws, though I think you could go more in-depth on the former: any particular manner of speaking? A certain gait? Some other nervous habits perhaps, other than twisting her wedding ring? Just some ideas.
• She can be impatient: when, and under what circumstances? Is it people, or situations, that make her patience wear thin? Is she normally a patient person, or, if you want a more pejorative implication, opportunistic enough to keep herself in check most of the time?
• What do you mean by "discreet" in Talents? She knows how to hide, how to sneak around? Is she a very good liar? What exactly are her morals, her standards for herself and others (and is she a hypocrite in the sense where she holds others to a different standard than herself? you mention she's classicist)? How far is too far for her, where's the metaphorical "line" that should not be crossed when it comes to lying, and to getting what she wants?
• Is her Prejudice strong enough that she would throw around a slur? Again in relation to her morals, but also in relation to how she expresses and presents herself: is she very obvious about her biases, about her values? If she is a good salesperson she knows how to put on a charismatic face, is this attitude reserved solely for customers or does she fake it with people "close" to her, as well?
• She's bad at potions but potioneering is a hobby: what makes her want to persevere in something she is bad at and (from what I understand) isn't exactly necessary for her job?
• "‘Reading stories seems waste of time, I’d rather go out in the world and discover everything myself.’" This could go in Prejudices as well!
• Okay, so potioneering IS part of her job: how can she afford to be bad at it?
• Everything else in Social seems good!
• ooooooh her love interest is also her enemy how dramatic :D
• I really like her Gallery pictures, may I ask who's her faceclaim? (if you don't know that's fine too haha)
• Wow interesting backstory. You never mention a House for her, or are those different at Ilvermorny?

Overall an interesting character, especially as a lead! She could use some refinement in certain areas and some small details to add coherence, but you did good with her! I hope this was helpful :)

Wahjoo! This was very helpfull thank you! I'm gonna add some more details to her and change some things that seem unclear. Thank you!!

My faceclaim is from Haunting of Hill house, the act.ress name is Carla Gugino

@Kinarymo
Mahiru:

• Oh hey I remember this one from your instagram!! :D
• Also "Head Priest", I'm starting to see connections here, she created your Sword without a core right?
• Absolutely nothing to say about her Looks, everything looks good.
• What helped her pull out of this brief period of insanity? What helped her find that grip back on reality? How did she learn patience, and calmness? Also how did serving someone, as opposed to being the master of herself, affect her and how she regards authority, control, etc? If that makes sense.
• She is very manipulative; does her "showing genuine interest in the well being of her subjects" actually come from the heart, or is it a feigned genuineness?
• "she doesn't like ordering people around, instead treating them like actual human beings, with a life of their own." This jumped out at me a little, again, does she not like to order people, or does she feign this respect towards people because it's a good strategy for gaining trust? Is there any actual sincerity there, especially since she seems to do everything for her own benefit?
• "Also, goats are evil for some reason" this made me laugh, but best to find an actual reason :)
• She's a pathological liar, so is she very good at lying to herself as well?? Does she rationalize her actions at all?
• Good and precise History. But I will point out that although we do have the stereotype of age = wisdom, I'm not sure Mahiru fills out the quota for "wise". Strategic? yes. Observant and opportunistic and patient? Yes. But she is a fool for holding onto revenge for so long, especially in response to something that she completely deserved and had coming her way, and being unable to see past that is not very wise at all.

Good details, and well-thought out. Classic villain, which isn't a bad thing don't worry ;) You could refine her a little bit but I'd say you're good to go! Good luck.

@Morosis
That's very sweet of you :) Glad to see you again so soon!
Avia:

• I love her gallery, so many different styles! Very nice :)
• A "beautiful body" is very subjective, what exactly do you mean by that? And why should a scar ruin that beauty? (This is more personality but: Is she insecure about it, or does she see it as a battle scar that she is proud of?) Also, muscles automatically add some weight, so do you mean that she is slim, lean, small-limbed?
• omg as much as I myself describe things as "yes very gay" haha, I'm not sure what you mean in this context of clothes? I know there's a Gay(TM) and Bi(TM) AeStHeTiC(TM), if so I still think it warrants explanation for those who are not aware of these.
• I am not an authority on ethnicity, but I do believe chocolate is a little dark for someone Italian: is she mixed?
• Overall I LOVE her look very much.
• "Doesn't like being cornered " Unless this is related to claustrophobia, this is more of a Mannerism than a Condition.
• "childish but then mature" this statement contradicts itself haha. Do you mean perhaps that she's childish in certain ways but experienced and mature in other fields? Is she mature psychologically/emotionally but acts more her age/immaturely/silly? Try to detail this, everything else seems good (though I would avoid just listing words without explanation/anything to back it up, but that's more of a personal preference than anything haha).
• Talents and Hobbies all sound good
• Certain things in the Prejudice section aren't actual Prejudices, like "Likes to let people know that she disagrees with them and can sometimes be irking in her teasing" and "Doesn't like being wrong" and "Can be quick to correct " These could go in Personality or Mannerisms or Flaws!
• How is "Facility patient " a flaw? Same question for "Really loved her family".
• A LOT of things in the Motivations section would make more sense in other sections, or even in your Notes; "Sarcasm" isn't a motive, it's a reaction to what's around you; "Hacking" could be a motive, if she lives for breaking the law, but you would need to go more in depth about this; "Internet, memes and doritos" would only be a motive if she literally, physically lived for these things, if not they're better in Hobbies or somewhere in Social; the whole paragraph about viruses feels sort of out of place, and I don't see how it relates to her motivations, add a sentence to explain or move it to Notes as well; and her being LGBT could go in Motivations if she's a hardcore activist, which you would have to explain also, otherwise it's already pretty clearly established earlier in her Personality haha.
• "is very modern and urban styled" what do you mean by this? That she uses slang, that she's a stereotypical "young person" or "millennial" and acts a certain way that's associated with that? Try to be clearer, certain terms or expressions might not be universally understood and therefor are confusing to readers (or editors).
• Other than that her Mannerisms are very nice and cover some interesting details, though again "Is a master of computers and is a supreme hacker" feels a little out of place and would fit better in talents, which it already is.
• God, tragic backstory. Very interesting, and telling of her personality, that she still has not opened the letter from her father: this tendency to avoid her negative emotions and suppress her problems could definitely be elaborated in Nature, if you're up for it.
• Some other things that come up in her Backstory that I hadn't picked up on from her Nature section: does she have any trust issues at all? She took so many hits at such a young age, I feel like that should be made more obvious in her Nature. Does she use flirtation and humor as defense mechanisms? How does she even cope with what happened to her? I'm surprised you never mention any social awkwardness, with how much she isolated herself and then the fact that she was kidnapped and tortured: is she naturally a social butterfly?? Even if she is, how can she just be fine after everything that happened?

A great character who's profile was a little disorganized: you have a lot of elements and details that, if structured a little better, could create a much nicer coherence for Avia. I hope you found this helpful and not too harsh, I really quite like Avia. Good luck!

@izzyandgrace
Hi, please only send one character at once! (I think I put that in my introduction post.). If you want to re-send Isobel after I've done Grace, feel free!
But before you do ANY of that haha, I can't seem to access Grace. Can you make her public please? Thank you :)

@NotSoBeautifulDiseaster
Micheal:

• Be more specific in Body Type, is he a slim rectangle or a chubby rectangle or a thicc rectangle haha.
• Same for Hair Style, is his hair short or long, curly or wavy or straight, messy in an unbrushed manner or in a purposefully charming manner? What's the situation with bangs? (Or lack of bangs?)
• What kind of brown is his hair? There a lots of shades.
• You'll have to elaborate how "-Sharp-tongued" is a minus for his personality: does it get him in trouble? Does he not know how to control his sharp-tongue? Because this could be seen as a good thing for a shy person, a trait that allows them to stand up for themselves.
• "Do Unto Others Before They Do Unto Us" Sorry, I don't know this expression?? What do you mean when you say this?
• In general his Nature section could be elaborated a little better, I can sort of get a feel for who he is but only just barely?? What other Mannerisms (or Quirks) does he have? Does he slouch, does he avoid eye-contact, does he try to make himself small or unnoticeable? What are some of his adverse reactions to, say, being forced to leave the house? How does he respond to authority, and what does it take to earn his respect and his willingness to listen? You started something in Beliefs, any other important details about his moral compass?
• what exactly is his tactic for "never speaking to Sophie again", when the two live together?

A bit barer than his sister, and a bit empty for someone who has a Protagonist label. You've got the basics down, so I would focus on elaborating a little more and maybe relaying some elements to each other to create more of a cohesiveness in his profile. Good luck!

@izzyandgrace
Yep, got her! And thank you in advance :)
Grace:

• I'm going to function under the assumption that whenever there's a slash that it indicates a timeskip.
• Good detail for Hair Style, but what about actual hair length? Also there are many shades of blue, try to find a more specific adjective.
• Try to be more specific in Body Type as well, does she have a small waist? wide shoulders? broad or small or sharp curves? any muscles?
• I can't really get a visual for Grace, maybe add some detail in Identifying Marks? Like if she has a certain aura about her, or if she wears a certain expression often, if she has a distinctive face-shape or particular details about the size of her hands, or tattoos, or beauty marks, or a certain gaze, etc.
• Her Prejudice is vague, and I don't quite understand out of context. Elaborate.
• Her Nature section is VERY bare; try to fill out the bare minimum for every section in that tab, like Mannerisms and Flaws, and add more to Personality Type. I honestly have NO IDEA what Grace is like, and there isn't much critique I can give here because of that. Is she shy? Outgoing, but rebuked for her efforts? What's her sense of humor like, does she trust easily, is she naive, is she excitable, does she carry her heart on her sleeve or is she more closed off, afraid to trust others despite wanting to be with others? So much stuff that I don't know and that I can't guess.
• Okay, so so much of her Background could (and should) be in Nature, maybe move some things around? Elaborate on how she's withdrawn but lonely, and how is she a popular girl when people think she is creepy? Why does she carry these weapons? Even still she needs more traits and qualifiers, I feel like I'm only seeing the outer layer of her personality.

It is hard to critique things that are not there haha. There isn't much else I can say; if you want to bring Grace back to me after you've filled her out more, I'd love to critique her more seriously/in-depth when there's actually more material. Good luck!

ya want to do another of mine? your critiques are so in depth!
here's TK: Tannika Kingsley

@Kaloobia

1. Yep, she's the one, she has a whole set actually not just a sword. shes also the one who made Narion's life miserable
2. What pulled her out of her insanity was the young Morphidae she took control of. Taking over a creature with a lot of magical resources partially brought her back into her comfort zone and eventually led to her calming down. The newly found powers weren't as strong as the ones she had before, but it was better than nothing at all. As for serving someone else, she is technically the one with all the power, the king is just for facade. She didn't take the king title for herself for strategic reasons.
3. It's kind of a mix of both, i mean she cares for humans since she got to where she is now thanks to them, while its also a strategic move. A win-win situation, kinda :0
4. Goats are just weird (but cute imo)
5. She lies a lot, yes, but she knows when to stop. A lot of times she even twists things around just to turn a lie into a truth
6. Good point here. She wasn't right in the head when she swore she would exterminate morphidae, but she had already taken the first step in that direction when she decapitated that young boy. I had a lot of trouble coming up with a motive for her (7 yrs and im still unsure of it), but i was wondering if it would be a good idea for her to have a reason as to why she tried stealing the island's magic. If she was in a stressful situation that forced her to resort to stealing, it would make sense to me as to why she's mad about losing her power and why shes doing what she does to take it back. And the genocide thing wouldnt be just meaningless killing, but her various attempts at finding out a solution for her problem (as weird as it may sound). I mean, just making her Crimson Set alone had a lot of failed attempts. Making her a little tragic sounds a little better than just pure greed. I havent decided on what that starter event was tho.

Overall, she was meant to be a villain depending on the side she's viewed from. For everyone else, she's a great person, but for Morphidae she brings nothing but misery. Im really bad at coming up with a motivation for a villain, so i really dont know how to handle this well :')) If i decide going the tragic route, she may one day realize she was a fool for holding on to revenge, that her rage was directed at the wrong people - i cant really bring myself to make her unredeemable 100%, so i want to leave some hope for her, though i dont know how yet.

Thx for the critique, it was very helpful as always! o3o

@Virus
I already did! Check the first page of this topic again, somewhere at the halfway point.