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Samuel grew up in a super strict perfectionist household and was an only child, and when he turned 16 his parents realized how compelling of a writer he was and forced him to work for the Duchess. She then abused him for 4 years and made him the public's scapegoat for everything they dislike about her reign, and when he was confronted in public by a rebel and panicked enough not to 'defend her honor', she badly breaks his ankle and forces him into the rebellion as her spy. He finally finds a friend in Joan and the other rebels and betrays the Duchess by giving her incorrect information but then the rebels change their plans and he accidentally leads them right to the rebels. He himself is sent into the palace with Joan and gets stabbed for his efforts. Then he gets sent on a high-stress mission for resources in a chaotic country he's totally unprepared for.

Whistle Intense.

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Meg started off as an energetic and happy young woman raised in the upper class of the dystopia she lives in. She's in a stable relationship with Ilona Tobit and has a close relationship with her sister and good-as sister in law. However, as the Duchess's rule gets worse and worse, Ilona leaves to become an actor in Creston instead. Meg is devastated by this but refuses to show it, and strikes up a relationship with Darius (I say 'relationship' but it was just 'friends with benefits'. Minus the 'friends' part) because both were pining after someone who left. They eventually breaks it off and Meg goes back to being alone. During this time, she and her sister have grown apart do to her sister's place in the Duchess's military and she's more or less left with a bunch of friends, but no one to talk to. This changes when she meets Jon at a party and they get to know each other, but he's a rebel and she has ties to the Duchess so they break up. Later on, her sister is killed in action and Jon is captured, and when it's revealed that her sister's death may not have been by rebels or 'friendly fire', she breaks Jon out and they run off. He gets injured and they barely make it to the rebel base, where she finally finds some people who'll listen to her.
And then Jon gets stabbed by her sister's killer he lives but still

@Inkfeather

Okay, I have like a billion characters that I've written in my time, and a lot of them have similar backstories, so I'll just pick a few. Some aren't THAT horrible but are still unthinkable to live through. I'm a sucker for romance, so a lot of them have 'happy' endings with their love interest (happy, as in Marius and Cosette at the end of Les Mis. Like, we're together, but all of our friends were murdered.)

John Harrison, Jr. (Jack)-
Jack was five years old when his mother died giving birth to his younger sister, Olivia (she goes by Livvy). His father, who was already a little too free with the alcohol, went pretty crazy. He became a drunkard, he started smoking even more than he already did, and all he could see in his little children was his dead wife. He started abusing them, and he never cared for them. Jack had to basically raise his sister, taking the brunt of everything. His father would hit, kick, bite, punch, and he would even come at them with knives. At school, Jack had no friends, because he knew that if he accidentally let even one thing slip, his father would kill him and his sister (that was what his dad threatened. Jack knew that if he was drunk enough, it could actually happen). Not to mention, they lived in a crime-ridden city, so the police never noticed anything, because people would get shot on the streets daily, and they were a little preoccupied. Since Jack never told anyone, no one noticed. Until Jack was twelve, and Livvy was seven, when a social security worker came to their house. She had been contacted by Jack's teacher, who had noticed his scars and bruises when his shirt sleeve accidentally rolled up for a moment. They took the two away and sent their father to prison. The two (who were incredibly close) were in foster care for a few months, when an older couple came. They wanted to take both but could only financially afford one. They lived near a good school and were kind people, and Jack insisted they take Livvy. Four years later, Jack's father was let out of jail after being 'completely reformed'. He swore he had recovered, and the authorities couldn't find any reason why he shouldn't get his son back, after watching him for a month. So Jack went back to his father. And discovered that he was exactly the same. He had become an incredible actor in prison, and he kept the house spotless. He rarely hit Jack hard enough to bruise, so he had no evidence against him. They end up moving to another state (so that Jack's only form of communication with Livvy and her adoptive family was letters, and he tore up anything Jack tried to send). Meanwhile, without Livvy to protect, Jack has become very closed-off. He gets into a lot of legal trouble, stealing things and whatnot, and he comes to a new high school. This town is very close, so a new kid who's also a jerk is insane. They all hate him, but he falls in love with the smartest person in class (tied with him, actually). Her name is Lena, and she's the main character of the story. (They end up together, but that's not part of his tragic story). He actually nearly commits suicide, and Lena stops him. That's when she finds his sketchbook of drawings (he's an incredible artist, and captured his mother, Livvy, and father with picture-like accuracy, all with just pencil), and it takes off from there.

Ben Lockwood-
Ben has a sort of curse (not a real curse, because there's no magic in this world). First, I should give some background. The series I place Ben in is called Throne of Lies, and it takes place in a world where America lost the Revolution, and now, 250 years later, they're trying again, this time with bombs, planes, and advanced technology. He is an American soldier, but no one likes him. He's cold, rude, and avoids everyone. However, this because of his 'curse'. The villain of the story has sworn that everyone Ben loves will die. When he was ten, he watched his parents, brother, and sisters get murdered right before his eyes. They had been an incredibly close family. When he was eleven, his grandmother, who had taken him in, was killed. Then, a man who had taught Ben for years was slaughtered. (All of these deaths are horribly gruesome; the villain has a habit of slicing off limbs/facial features one by one until you bleed to death). When he was fourteen, he met his best friend, Erik. The two become closer than the closest brothers. Then Erik was killed when Ben was sixteen. This was when the villain finally tells him that he will murder everyone Ben loves. And Ben swears he will never love anyone in any way, ever again. Fast forward two years, and Lady Avery Braxen (she's British, but her mother is American, and the two spy for America), granddaughter of the leaders of the special branch of the military (they are highly skilled, specially chosen soldiers who spy and assassinate and do the shadow work), comes. And he breaks his promise to himself. They just have to hope they can kill the villain before he kills her. But don't worry! Until the end of the first book, Avery's in love with a man who seems perfect, and who seems to love her back, but who is actually the son of the villain, and who is planning to kill them all.

Tom and Alyce Hart-
Tom and Alyce are twins in Victorian Era England who were abused, starved, and treated awfully by their father. Their stepmother, Elisabeth, is kind and loving to them, and hates the way her husband treats them. However, he will often treat her the same way when she speaks out, and the twins begged her to stop, insisting that she wouldn't help them if she was stuck with them. When they were sixteen, their father arranged a marriage for Alyce with a wealthy, abusive forty-year-old (sixteen was young for marriage even back then). With Elisabeth's help, two ran away, finally willing to risk death. I forgot to mention, but these two are the sweetest, most helpful, loyalist, kindest people ever. They are like Newt Scamander in the fact that if you look up 'cinnamon roll' in the dictionary, you find their pictures. After they run away, they nearly starve/freeze about a million times, and because Alyce is so young and beautiful, men frequently try to assault her, attacks which she and Tom can barely fend off. Tom is nearly arrested multiple times, just for being near a rich man's daughter (it's the same rich man each time, and Tom and his daughter eventually fall in love), and for looking so poor. Shop owners would see him outside, and assume he was going to steal something. Even through their hardships, they refused to take so much as a single apple from anyone without paying in full, because they kept up the strong moral standards that Elisabeth instilled in them. They end up reuniting with Elisabeth, who came with Clara (Tom's girlfriend) and Clara's eight-year-old brother, Robert. Of course, Elisabeth was killed right in front of them, so there's that. (Robert wasn't there when she died. He's not the victim here). Eventually, Tom and Alyce are killed by their own father, together. It is the only (small) mercy I could offer them: death at the same time, so neither had to live without the other.

I'll probably have more later. Maybe I'll come back!

@howlsmovingbrain

Ooh okay I have a list but I'm gonna go with my favorite one:
Jade, went on a trip to London with her best friend to find out what the hell was happening and why a bunch of priceless artifacts were missing. She came back and her mom (who was an alcoholic) died on the same day she got home. The next week, she finds out one of her friends is a fairy and she's a half-elf. The day after that, her best friend gets taken captive by the very brutal and merciless antagonists. She then has to go save him, almost dies, and somehow escapes. She meets a few other people with the same powers as her. And finally, at the end, one of her closest friends is killed by her own brother.

THEN THERE'S BOOK TWO

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Not as bad, though Empirean faces betrayal by a former ally by having his left eye blinded and wounded - a lot. He wasn’t able to heal his eye.
He also witnesses the death of his mother (though it’s after a battle, so in all honesty it’s more of a sad thing if anything.)

A lot of my monster characters get into fights. A lot of them.

Injured that I’ve given them in the fight include, but are not limited to:
Spine removal (Not many experience this, but the few that have aren’t really alive anymore.)
Gutted
Breaking of the jaws
Blinded
Getting impaled by an overpowered ice creature (and dying)
Beheaded (Look to spine removal, expectations are made but still a painful thing to experience usually)

Boy, being a monster is metal.

@hollow-boned

i'm waay too nice to my characters but

Feraen: had to escape to a different country when she was ten, mom died during the chase and they had to leave her there. ten years later, her father is almost executed for being caught with contraband(which belonged to Feraen) but Kalo pulls some strings and gets him put in jail for life. she spends most of the book trying to break him out.

Kalo: is separated from her childhood friends when she's young and has to sneak out of the palace to be around them. is forced into an arranged engagement to a psychopath whilst falling for Feraen.

@WaffleWizard

I've murdered a few children in my day.
Mardrie- Shot, later suffocated in a fire
Gram- Poor pure child shot and killed someone and had to live with that (Not Mardire)
Yvette- Witnessed a few people die. Ran around and starved to death for several weeks
Mcgee- Manipulated into killing his younger brother
Rylo- Had her memory wiped of her family and friends
Timothy- Suffocated in space
Olivia- Got kidnapped from her home
Les- Had to live with the stress and guilt of kidnapping someone (Honestly he was more traumatized)
Peter- Parents were killed. His siblings gave up on him after a misunderstanding and joined forces with the villain of the story. Got kidnapped a few times. Had his magic ripped from his very being
Carson- Was experimented on
Osmond- A hybrid of species rejected from society

That's all I've got off the top of my head. But that's probably a character from every story I've written

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Jayson:
Born into what's basically a mafia. His sister is the don, and she's not a good person. She constantly belittles him and drags him into plans that never work out well for anyone involved. He finally makes a break for it and runs off, finding a close group of friends only to watch the girl he loves get her leg blow off in an explosion his sister causes and is taken away from her. 3 years later they meet again after his sister antagonizes the closest thing that his country has to a leader. Then andrew (Our Supreme Lord and Overseer), the only stable figure in his life is killed by his sister. He's able to get one of his friends out of the country, and the others all die (maybe? still working out the ending). Also his sister shatters his hand in a fight, leaving him unable to use it. Yay.

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That's dark. But honestly I would do something like that. I'm the person however that has created a character that seems just important enough not to kill, and just when everyone starts to think that, I kill him.

Why?

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Because I can't let my readers get away without breaking their precious hearts at least once. Plus it was essential to the plot. He had to go, in order for several things to happen that were important.

Well pain for the sake of pain is a bad policy. But if it's for a good reason it's okay.

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Yea, I came up with a lame excuse for everything that happened to my character. My story revolves around keeping balance in the multiverse, and I have Hinata figured out at the end that maybe individuals need balance too, and that the more good she does that wasn't fate is coming back and finding balance in her.

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Well, I have a new one fellas: Created them.

Or rather, just Ateris. My character, Ateris is a special case, since it lives its life in physical pain (its inner body structure is so messed up, it doesn't function like any creature we know of on Earth.)

Ateris used to be an arena fighter for an alien race in its past life. I was debating making it human at one point, but then I decided I could fit that in in some other way. Ateris had an appearance that looks somewhat similar to its current one, although this past appearance looks a lot healthier and more.. whole..? Not really sure how to word it. Anywho, Ateris was a champion at this sort of fighting until one day, a fighter who was some sort of demonic space entity arrived and knocked Ateris out of the ring. The aliens left Ateris, now supporting this new entity, and Ateris was supposed to die here.

It did not.

Ateris, bleeding and tired, dragged itself to a cave where it went to sleep, and healed surprisingly fast (which was influenced by another entity.) Eventually, the entity contacted Ateris through its mind and told Ateris to "kill them," and Ateris was pretty much like Why would I do that? at first, but the entity told Ateris it had healed Ateris, and promised more power if Ateris followed its desires. Ateris, recalling how it was brutally kicked from its spot and left to die, went to kill the space entity, and succeeded, but the other influencing entity left it, hoping to return once Ateris was killed by the aliens and use Ateris' body as a shell. However, Ateris didn't like this and let's just say the aliens didn't have a good day that day. A leader of the alien race saw this and cursed Ateris to another planet where it would live its life in 'eternal pain' without being able to die. A cost of the curse was wiping the memory of Ateris, though this was good, should Ateris ever achieve space travel, it would not return to their species. That planet was earth. Ateris lived there for a long time, and like I said, living life in pain, but also causing pain to living creatures around it. It survived some extinction events but fell asleep, then woke up, and boom, there were little villages everywhere.

The rest is history. Literally. And future, as well.

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Sooo the worst thing I have done to my OC is to gave his such a girly name Alexander and I know it is not that girly but it sounds girly to me so it is too late for me to change his name but I love him because he is such a little cinnamon roll and also a demon. :D

Madi

I killed my favorite character's girlfriend, someone he'd been dating for over a hundred years (he's not human), and then when he finally moved on and got another girlfriend I killed her, too. But then I brought her back as a cyborg.

@ThetaSigma

TAMW you've done so many horrible things to your character's you don't know which is the worst.

I think it would probably be having an 8 year old get tortured with fire. Then, after she escapes and accidentally kills her torturer, she gets convicted of killing the guy who tortured her and sent off to a very spooky mental hospital for 2 years that literally has no idea how to handle mental health things and wound up just torturing this poor 8 y/o more.

Oh and did i mention that the torture didn't end there?

Yeah, the rest of her life is pretty much torture.

O_O. I have an equal

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Oh man…

Syifa

my baby queirra was born a stillborn, then she lives again with that kind of restoring dead's person deal yadda yadda yadda with a lot of pricey deal which probably gonna torture him the rest of her life (especially those dead soul who vent their pain and suffering to her). she bear the curse mark, she lost her mother at 7 (her mother only comes back when she dies so that's gonna make her feel guilty for being alive) and almost killed by her father at 14, runaway and living alone with her friends until 19, meanwhile working at super secret company which y'know torturing and brainwashing and stuff is a daily thing. oh dont forget one of her foot is kinda limp. and also when she comes back to her home her father has an adoptive daughter so seeking for recognition is a hard thing to do now. and then i make her fight with her greatest fear, and she's dead with her body literally like crushed can, but she lives again yadda yadda yadda, but that broken body ain't a thing to be fixed :(

^^^^Why though?

not the worst thing i've done but-
i've stuck Adonis into the prosthetic arm of an annoying teenager
bc he's a ghost and he got stuck possessing it
so uh, now he' stuck with said annoying teenager
and he's Carmen's husband, so,, yeah both his kids are dead and Carmen is now in the military bc of sadness

Syifa

^^^^Why though?

Coz i like her to suffer even though she's my favourite character. And somehow the suffering i put her through fit with the story so yeah

I meant @ThetaSigma but why do you like your baby to suffer?

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Because writers are sadists.
In all honesty, I write characters who suffer because I enjoy it, and because it helps add stakes and depth to plot and character.
I also like examining how they react when they're completely helpless since that can tell you a lot about them.
And I enjoy writing them in pain.

Because writers are sadists.
In all honesty, I write characters who suffer because I enjoy it, and because it helps add stakes and depth to plot and character.
I also like examining how they react when they're completely helpless since that can tell you a lot about them.
And I enjoy writing them in pain.

Honestly though on all points.

@ThetaSigma

^^^^Why though?

To be honest plot. And also because I'm a mean author with a dark imagination? But yeah, mostly plot…..

Okey.

@FreeSpirit

The worst thing I think I've done is taken my most tiny and innocent character and put them in a situation in which their leg got ripped off and now they have PTSD and nightmares and all that fun stuff.